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This is the feedback thread for "Fire Emblem Heroes: House of Sues". Please keep all feedback to this thread so as to not clutter the main story. This story was unspooled as originally written at varying intervals between roughly 9:40 PM Central to 1:10 AM Central on the evening of May 4, 2019 (going into May 5 based on strict adherence to dates changing over at midnight). My thoughts as to the project were posted below once the last chapter finished; as I did not want my vision to be influenced by comments as I was unspooling it, I would have not read any comments posted in the interim until after the project was finished. As the opening spiel at the start of the story implies, bringing my vision to life involved opening a few small cans of worms unavoidably (as not everybody's going to agree with how I've handled some of the quirks), but opening major cans of worms--or worse, Pandora's Box--was not my intent. I want people to enjoy the story for what it is as a whole, not being majorly irked by minor choices in character quirks.
DISCLAIMER: The experience portrayed in this fanfic is not intended to be representative of any particular player of Fire Emblem Heroes, and the character quirks of any Fire Emblem series character therein is not intended to be representative of any canonical depiction of said character. Full-on adherence to canonical depictions has been set aside in favor of entertainment value. Even if you personally disagree with any portrayal of said character quirks--and there is a fairly large chance that you may indeed personally disagree with at least one of these quirks--it is best to accept this difference of opinion and simply enjoy the fanfic on its own merits. My material, by my own admission, has been known to be quite lame among those that have experienced it, and I make no guarantee that this fanfic will be a high-quality masterpiece; odds are it will come across as cheesy D-list material at best. I hope you enjoy "House of Sues". Contains suggestive themes and "inventive" allusions to foul language. Parental discretion is advised. If you wish to comment about this story, use the feedback thread. ---- Chapter 1: Meet the Sues [A Summoner enters the summoning chamber] [SUMMONER] Selecting banner..."Colored Bows". [SUMMONER] Summon! [Summoning circle appears; five green orbs appear] [SUMMONER] Select upper right! [Summoning process; summons 5-star "Sue: Doe of the Plains"] [SUE #2] I am Sue of the Kutolah tribe. The blood of the Hero of the Plains, Dayan, runs in my veins. (The reason why this particular Sue is stated to be "Sue #2" will be explained shortly.) [SUMMONER] Select again. Lower left! [Summoning process; summons 5-star "Sue: Doe of the Plains"] [SUE #3] I am Sue of the Kutolah tribe. The blood of-- [SUMMONER] Yeah, blood of Dayan in my veins, I know, I know! Next! Lower right! [Summoning process; summons 5-star "Sue: Doe of the Plains"] [SUE #4] I am Sue of the-- [SUMMONER] Yeah, yeah, Kutolah, blood of Dayan, yada, yada, yada. Next! Upper left! [Summoning process; summons 5-star "Sue: Doe of the Plains"] [SUE #5] I am-- [SUMMONER] Yeah, I know, Sue, Kutolah, blood of Dayan, not my first rodeo! Final selection, topmost! [Summoning process; summons 5-star "Sue: Doe of the Plains"] [SUE #6] I-- [SUMMONER] Yeah, I know, I've heard it plenty already! [Summoning circle shows results: All five positions show a five-star "Sue: Doe of the Plains"] [A short time later, in the Barracks] [Sues #2-#6 walk onto the scene, into a room wherein Sue #1 is already seated. Further in the background are a number of other characters, most notably eight different Lilinas (six normal-variation, two Valentine's-variation).] [SUE #1] What? That summoner summoned five more of me?! Just what are the odds? [SUE #2] Yeah, now that's six Dayans who are worried sick! Six grandfathers forced into worry! Six more people who are having to go through having a loved one plucked by that summoning ritual! [SUE #3] Not sure about the rest of you, but I'm not sure my Dayan would even survive the shock of finding out about my disappearance. [SUE #4] Eh, I'm sure your Dayan would be just fine. Surely he can take care of himself, and if not, he's got his son Rath and daughter-in-law Lyn to help! [Six of the Lilinas in the background sneer at Sue #4] [SUE #2] Wait, "his daughter-in-law Lyn"? That's news to me! Last I checked, Lyn had been the Marchioness of Ostia when she died! [LILINA #3] Yeah, you tell her! [LILINA #6] For Mom! [LILINAS #1, #3, #4, #6, & #V1] Yeah, for Mom! (For the record, these are five of the Lilinas who had sneered at Sue #4 upon mentioning Lyn. Lilina #V2 also sneered at Sue #4, but did not chime in on this line.) [SUE #2] And Lyn surely never married Uncle Rath... [SUE #4] UNCLE Rath? You take that back! If my father, Rath, heard us calling him uncle, he'd go ballistic! [SUE #1] Hold it, everybody! You [pointing to Sue #2] say that Rath's your uncle and Lyn married Hector? While you [pointing to Sue #4] say that Rath's your father and Lyn's your mother? I suspect we're not as similar as I thought we'd be. I'm thinking that each one of us came from worlds where certain things played out differently. [SUE #5] How differently? [SUE #1] That, I'm not entirely sure right now. From what I've read from our libraries here, summoning rituals have been known to tap into quite a many different realities, with quite a number of different combinations possibly taking place between them. For all we know, the only thing we know for sure we all have in common is that we've got a grandfather named Dayan, and we know he's got a son named Rath. Now, we know that in your [pointing to Sue #4] case as well as mine, Rath is our father, but our mothers are not the same. But in your [pointing to Sue #2] case, you're the daughter of some other child of Dayan's and in turn Rath's your uncle, but you're also like me in a respect in that my world's Lyn was also the Marchioness of Ostia at the time of her death. [SUE #2] So you're suggesting that we're not identical? [SUE #1] Precisely! We're all clearly as different as night and day. Given my experience here, we're far from the only ones from being dissimilar from their counterparts. I'm familiar with a number of different Roys and Lilinas, and not every Roy is a son of Ninian's nor every Lilina a daughter of Lyn's like from back where I came from. And god forbid I even outright assume any given Lucina is the daughter of any given possibility! [pointing to Lilina #V2] I noticed you sneered at that Sue who stated Lyn was her mother, but I didn't see your mouth move with the other five. May I ask, what's your mother's name? [LILINA #V2] Florina. Lyn was a very good friend of my mother's, and in my case Lyn died in Pherae as its marchioness. [SUE #1] [pointing to Lilina #2] And your mother's name? [LILINA #2] I don't know for sure, I never knew my mother. I do know for sure that Lyn never married in my case, and I also know that I do not have any Ilian heritage. [SUE #1] Anyway, I don't think we should be trying to get at each other's throats. There's six of us Sues here now, and we're going to need to get along if we hope to survive this journey in the long term. We really should get to know each other for who we really are, no matter how similar and different we are from one another. [SUE #6] As proud nomads of Sacae, we really do need to stick together. I'm sure my Uncle Rath and Aunt Lyn wouldn't appreciate it if we stayed at each other's throats. [SUE #4] ...Aunt Lyn? As in, your world's Rath and Lyn also married, yet you're not their daughter? [SUE #6] Yep, I'm a daughter of Rath's brother, and Rath and Lyn's own daughter is my cousin. [SUE #1] Well, I see we have a lot to learn about one another. Why don't we get situated somewhere, perhaps a room just for us, and I'll start off? [SUE #3] Good idea.