Inactive Account Posted January 26, 2009 Author Share Posted January 26, 2009 (edited) Blunt doesn't equal mean. Sarcastic... well, kinda. You're still overreacting. Edited January 26, 2009 by Kiryn Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
riariadne Posted January 28, 2009 Share Posted January 28, 2009 sorry... anyway the story is still awesome. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Freohr Datia Posted February 3, 2009 Share Posted February 3, 2009 A heron... and a raven... with kids?... Is this Naesala and Leanne, possibly? =o Hmm..... Or maybe someone else... Yay! Can't wait for the next one!!! =D Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mufasa Posted February 16, 2009 Share Posted February 16, 2009 Newest episode is up. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Freohr Datia Posted February 28, 2009 Share Posted February 28, 2009 (edited) Ooh! I just read Mongrel! Yay I was right! It was Naesala and Leanne =D I hate it when I always forget to read a story for a while =/ But I read it!!! =) Edited February 28, 2009 by Freohr Datia Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
riariadne Posted March 3, 2009 Share Posted March 3, 2009 Hahaha, I liked the part where Fireman was like "I smell smoke, Fox must've burned something". That was a great new episode (both of them since I didn't comment on the other one) Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ragnell Posted March 10, 2009 Share Posted March 10, 2009 (edited) I just began reading the story, and I noticed one problem: you shift between the past and present tense. I saw this problem mainly in Lyle's first post. It seemed to disappear later, but I just wanted to let you know. Chase stared wide eyed at the group in front of them. “You aren’t alone Amy....” Shocked by the fact that he’s in the presence of such high standing people, he regains some hope of rescue. “Any clue why we were kidnaped?” It should have been either: Chase stared wide eyed at the group in front of them... Shocked by the fact that he was in the presence of such high standing people, he regained some hope of rescue. or Chase stares wide eyed at the group in front of them... Shocked by the fact that he's in the presence of such high standing people, he regains some hope of rescue. Assuming you want to match your later style, I would use the first. But this isn't the only instance, reread Lyle's first post and you'll see conflicting tenses quite often. Besides that, it seems very interesting. I'll read more soon. Edited March 10, 2009 by Ragnell Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Inactive Account Posted March 10, 2009 Author Share Posted March 10, 2009 (edited) We're rectifying that. The problem's mostly fixed now. (in the later episodes, that is; we haven't retroactively corrected but may do that at some point) Edited March 10, 2009 by _____ Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Freohr Datia Posted March 10, 2009 Share Posted March 10, 2009 Ooh... lol, Lyle XD Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
xanatha Posted March 11, 2009 Share Posted March 11, 2009 (edited) I wish I had started to read this earlier! It's great and I love it!!! I'm not done yet, but I'll catch up soon! EDIT: Well, now I'm done! Didn't want to double post. I think that... magical procedure... seems like a very good plot. I look forward to the next part! Edited March 16, 2009 by xanatha Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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