Sevensins Posted July 26, 2008 Share Posted July 26, 2008 It was in that day, so long ago, that the hooded man approached The leaves of fall blew raspily, and the winter's chill encroached The Wanderer met with cold winds and eyes Troubled was this man's gait He walked beneath the clouded skies Yet asked for a troubling state: "The end of the world is nigh," he said, a crimson light did shine "Demons come this way hence, you're in need of protection divine..." The other laughed and spat at him, yet a reaction did not break Some stood about in the lights, dim, and others did think him fake Still others took to weapons, farming scythes and fire; And I took my blade to protect the town against the approaching ire The Wanderer whispered to the wind, a plea to them and me; "Your friends are foolish and thou art brave; bravery is the key." "Do not look back upon your village, for this may be your last day..." A few able men left us there, to tend to their house and home A sullen glare was scarcely seen upon our savior's dome Yet in the end, a good dozen of us did fight and slay Dawn approached, and the fires were deemed intense Only four of us remained, yet we managed, tense The Wanderer stood watching, silent in the chill; The other two went to the inn to laugh and drink their fill Thus he and I, and I and him, stood watch over the fields; Few demons lived, but ran away; to our might they yield I noted that the man before me had been stricken with a wound I asked him there, as Sol rose, why did he still live? He turned to me and with a smile, his eyes became active That eerie glow, of red and crimson shone He said one thing before the light grew and left me...alone? The wind repeated those words to me; I left that village hence I searched and traveled, and wound up at a shining sea At which I saw a statue of the Wanderer in penance... At the base of the statue, his words that day I did see; By the angels and demons..."As if Hell could ever hold me..." Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nightmare Posted July 26, 2008 Share Posted July 26, 2008 As I said on IRC... Awesome. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Suzaku Posted July 27, 2008 Share Posted July 27, 2008 really good damn i wish i did that poem, because i really like it Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Songbird Posted July 27, 2008 Share Posted July 27, 2008 That was awesome, Sins! Really well-written, too! It was also somewhat creepy. XD Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zanarkin Posted July 27, 2008 Share Posted July 27, 2008 Awesome i think this could be published Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Emeraldfox Posted July 27, 2008 Share Posted July 27, 2008 What are those poems that tell a story called again? Because I think this is one of those.. Pretty cool. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sevensins Posted July 27, 2008 Author Share Posted July 27, 2008 It's too short to be an epic, so... >_> Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kyrra Posted July 27, 2008 Share Posted July 27, 2008 (edited) Dude, if poems like THAT come from you normally, even if they don't, you have some serious skill, dude. Keep it up. Edited July 27, 2008 by Kyrra Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Knife Posted July 27, 2008 Share Posted July 27, 2008 Nice work. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zanryu Posted July 27, 2008 Share Posted July 27, 2008 I fucking love you. End of story. O_O Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sevensins Posted July 30, 2008 Author Share Posted July 30, 2008 I fucking love you.End of story. O_O Why thank you, but NTG is the only one for me ^_~ Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lost_Soul_Renault Posted July 31, 2008 Share Posted July 31, 2008 Its pretty good. the only problem I see is that some of your word choices messes up the natural rhythm. it just needs to be tweaked here and there, and it will be perfect. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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