HowAreYaBud Posted September 13, 2008 Share Posted September 13, 2008 Nice chapter. When do I come in? I must know! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Not Changed by VASM :( Posted September 13, 2008 Author Share Posted September 13, 2008 Chris is gone mysteriously....lolThis entire chapter is a big cliff!! Remember you pussed out at Chapter 6. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phoenix Wright Posted September 13, 2008 Share Posted September 13, 2008 will I be coming back? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Not Changed by VASM :( Posted September 13, 2008 Author Share Posted September 13, 2008 will I be coming back? Of course. and when you do branded and Princess will be pissed Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Not Changed by VASM :( Posted September 14, 2008 Author Share Posted September 14, 2008 (edited) Chapter 8 (In Geno's Maze) Music: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TfI4aDnY92k Link: Finally, we found this Mushroom Kingdom place. *A little blue ball of light flies around Link's head* Navi: Yep, I thought we would be lost forever. Link: Wait I here soemthing? Navi: HEY LOOK! Link: What is that thing? Yoshi: ZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZ Link: *Poke's Yoshi* Yoshi: YOSHI! YOSHI! YOSH! Link: Oh crap... Yoshi: YOSHI YOSHI YOSHI Link: Navi I think it's trying to talk to me. Navi: He said you shouldn't poke people. Link: You understood that? Navi: Fairy Magic. Yoshi: YOSHI YOSHI! Navi: WHAT!!! Link: What is it? Navi: He said that his Island was detroyed by weird purple men? Link: Purple? Navi: That's what he said. *Suddenly the Sky Turns Red* Music: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=r9l-qetQFPg Link: The hell? Yoshi: YOSHI! Link: This happened on your Island to? Navi: You got that? Link: I am the Hero of Time. *20 Primid Spawn out and start attacking* Link: Navi Get in my Hat this could get ugly. Yoshi: YOSHI! Link: You should run buddy... Yoshi: YOSHI YOSHI! Link: Alright Fine but if it gets to hot for you pull out. Yoshi: YOSHI! *Grabs a Primid with his Tongue* Link: O_O Yoshi: *Throws the Primid at Link* Link: HAAA *Catch's Primid on his Sword* Yoshi: YOSHI! Link: SHYAAA! *Spin attacks* Yoshi: BRRRNG PAAA *Down B* Link: YEAH IS THAT ALL YOU GOT!!!! Yoshi: YOSHI YOSH! Primid: *Look Pissed* Music: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=IyjIiYq_3WM *A Green Robed figure floats in on a platform* ???: Primid, retreat. Link: WAIT WHO ARE YOU!!! ???: I am the Ancient Minister, that is all you need to know. _____________________________ (The Abandoned Zoo) Music: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=y7ZvmuUxoaI Lucas: Uhhh...I'm so bored... Lucas: Ever since Kumatora and Duster left. Lucas: I'm alone...Again... *Suddenly the Pig King Statue appears* Music: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=V5CjB16gM94 Statue: OH GO CUT YOU TINY WRIST! Lucas: AHHHHHH *Runs* Statue: YOU CAN'T RUN FOREVER LITTLE LUCAS! Lucas: I can try, I can try, I can *Trips* Lucas: DAMN YOU SAKARAAAIIIIIIIIIII! Statue: No escape now you little Chibi... ???: PK THUNDER! Lucas: Huh? Statue: Oh for the love of... *A Ball of Lightning hits The Pig King Statue* Music: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=j_QToro5P-I Lucas: Kumatora? ???: Who? Lucas: Who are you? ???: Ness, listen we'll talk latter I think THAT is our problem. Lucas: What's our Prob- *The Statue shatters and a giant Spider Mech rises from the rubble* Lucas: POKEY MINCH! Ness: I should have known... Pokey: OH CRAP...HOW DID YOU BREAK MY MACHINE! Ness: You thought you could escape by Time Traveling did you? Pokey: Yeah it almost worked, tell me ness how did you find me? Ness: I only have the Smartest 6th grader on the planet in my corner. Pokey: YOU AINT SEEN THE LAST OF ME *Teleports* Lucas: You made The Pig King surrender? _______________________________________ (Ridley's Ship) Music: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=CDP9oCBbuoI Pat: Here he is sir. Ridley: Well well if it isn't our unwilling guest. Masu: Your breathe smells. Ridley: *Claws Masu* Masu: Ow...I was just suggesting a fricken Tic-Tac Ridley: Well Mr.Magey has a sense of humor does he. Masu: My name is Masu not "Mr.Magey" Ridley: Mr. Masu how would you like to serve on my crew? Masu: No way your a Pirate. Ridley: Mr. Masu what if we told you we weren't giving you a choice? Masu: How did I not see that comeing? Rdiley: If you don't loyally serve us I make you one promose, Your feathered bitch won't live long enough to see YOUR funeral. Masu: Basterd... Ridley: That a yes? Masu: Yeah...What else. Rin: YAY I'm not the only Human anymore! Pat: HEY! Masu: Tales of Symphonia my ass. _______________________________ (Galactic Federation Research Lab) Music: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=--sRhAa45YI Samus(On Phone): Alright I've entered the Lab. ???: PIKA!!!! Samus: WOAH To be Continued... Edited September 14, 2008 by Toa Lord Sothe Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phoenix Wright Posted September 14, 2008 Share Posted September 14, 2008 Good chapter! :D Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Not Changed by VASM :( Posted September 14, 2008 Author Share Posted September 14, 2008 Good chapter! :D Your pissed that Chris wasn't there aren't you? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phoenix Wright Posted September 14, 2008 Share Posted September 14, 2008 No I'm just REALLY tired, It was an actually good chapter, but the Samus thing was only 3 lines lol... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
HowAreYaBud Posted September 14, 2008 Share Posted September 14, 2008 Another good chapter. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TLSothe Posted September 14, 2008 Share Posted September 14, 2008 ...Nice, this just gets better and better.. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tino Posted September 14, 2008 Share Posted September 14, 2008 Actual plot, you say? I'm sorry, but I've said this in another story here too, but there's too many dialogue. There's barely any actual text. Use more text and details. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TLSothe Posted September 14, 2008 Share Posted September 14, 2008 Actual plot, you say?I'm sorry, but I've said this in another story here too, but there's too many dialogue. There's barely any actual text. Use more text and details. And possibly right it..not in script form? I dunno, it's pretty good imo. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tino Posted September 14, 2008 Share Posted September 14, 2008 Right it? What do you mean with right it? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Not Changed by VASM :( Posted September 14, 2008 Author Share Posted September 14, 2008 1. I can only write script. 2. Actually there is a plot moron. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tino Posted September 14, 2008 Share Posted September 14, 2008 There is a plot, sure, but there's next to no detail and actual text. Details are what make stories interesting and fun to read. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gatrie: Guns Blazing Posted September 14, 2008 Share Posted September 14, 2008 2. Actually there is a plot moron. i see it... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phoenix Wright Posted September 14, 2008 Share Posted September 14, 2008 There is a plot, sure, but there's next to no detail and actual text. Details are what make stories interesting and fun to read. The dialogue says it all.... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tino Posted September 14, 2008 Share Posted September 14, 2008 Yes, in a dialogue you really get to know what the surrounding area looks like, what happens besides the conversations, what... etc. <_< You know what I mean. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Not Changed by VASM :( Posted September 14, 2008 Author Share Posted September 14, 2008 Yes, in a dialogue you really get to know what the surrounding area looks like, what happens besides the conversations, what... etc. <_<You know what I mean. Use your imagination. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Not Changed by VASM :( Posted September 14, 2008 Author Share Posted September 14, 2008 Yes, in a dialogue you really get to know what the surrounding area looks like, what happens besides the conversations, what... etc. <_<You know what I mean. Use your imagination. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phoenix Wright Posted September 15, 2008 Share Posted September 15, 2008 Yes, in a dialogue you really get to know what the surrounding area looks like, what happens besides the conversations, what... etc. <_<You know what I mean. He does he says:(In the Skyzone) and stuff like that. Plus unless you've never played Brawl that is where it takes place. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Not Changed by VASM :( Posted September 15, 2008 Author Share Posted September 15, 2008 Masu and Lyle are writeing now...Should I even bother? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TLSothe Posted September 15, 2008 Share Posted September 15, 2008 Right it? What do you mean with right it? Sorry. I was tired. Write* Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hibari Posted September 15, 2008 Share Posted September 15, 2008 Masu and Lyle are writeing now...Should I even bother? Of course you should. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Masu Posted September 15, 2008 Share Posted September 15, 2008 why not? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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