Mufasa Posted September 14, 2008 Share Posted September 14, 2008 (edited) This is just the pilot episode for my new story. So don't mind if it doesn't explain shit. A Hero’s Journey. Episode 1: Abrupt. *Plane. Inside a gloomy looking bar, a man with a crossbow resting on his shoulder and a coyboy hat covering his face sits at a table. A man who’s entire upper body is covered in bandages walks up to him and sits adjacent. He resembles something like a mummy, but with red hair poking out of the top of his head.* Bandaged Man: So...*His voice is deep.* When are you leaving? Other Man: Soon. This is something pretty heavy we’re getting into. You sure you wanna do it? Bandaged Man: If you want out, feel free to leave. Other Man: Heh. I’ve known you for a long time Lalmeyde. I’ll stick with ya. Lalmeyde: Good to know. You should be going soon. Other man: Just relax. I’ll get it done. Lalmeyde: Then I’m off. Don’t take too long Odion. Odion: Don’t worry. I’ll do him in. *Kilvas. A beorc walks around the Kilvas capital castle appearing to be looking for something.* Raven Laguz: Hey. You, kid! What are you doing here? Kid: I’m looking for the former King Naesala. Raven Laguz: Who are you? Kid: His adopted son. Raven Laguz: Pah. King Naesala has no use for a pathetic beorc child. Kid: Funny. Cause he adopted my sister anyway. Raven Laguz: He has no time to see the likes of you. Get out. Kid: ......Fine. But I’m lost, can you show me the exit? Raven Laguz: .....Fine. *He walks past the kid. The kid unsheathes his sword and hits the laguz over the head with the hilt. The raven laguz falls to the ground unconcious.* Zero: Sorry. You’ve just been Zeroed in on. *He continues to run down the hall. After a few turns he ends up at a door. After prepping his weapon, he moves to open the door.* Man: *Without warning the door opens and a man in a red trench coat grabs Zero and tosses him inside the room.* Zero: Ah! *He falls face first in front of Naesala.* Naesala: Huh. I guess you were right Hex. Hexblade: *Closes the door behind him.* I told you. Zero: Dammit. You knew I was here? Hexblade: Yes. Not only that, but we caught you accomplice. *He points to the corner of the room where a girl is completely tied up and gagged.* Zero: Bizz! Bizz: <_< Naesala: *Clearly uninterested in this and exasperated.* What do you want kid? Zero: Where’s my sister?! Naesala: .....Why the hell would I know that? Zero: You kidnaped her! Naesala; ......That’s all together possible. But by now she’s probably in Begnion or something. Zero: Jen! Her name was Jen! You took her and used her in some weird experiment! Naesala: *Raises an eyebrow.* Jen? I see. How much do you know about what I did to her? Zero: Only that you took her for an experiment. Where is she?! Naesala: Well, I’d hate to burst your bubble, but she’s not in Kilvas at the moment. Zero: You bastard....what did you do to her!? Naesala: I didn’t do anything. She left on her own. Zero: ......Huh? Hexblade: Yeah kid. She’s in Serenes forest. Zero: ._______. Bizz: (Idiot.....<_<) Zero: Oh....Er. Sorry to bother you. *He starts to back out.* Hexblade: Hold up. * He grabs Zero’s shirt.* We’re not done with you. Zero: Damn.... Naesala: You can’t just barge into Kilvas, start yelling at me, and then just walk out. Hexblade: Don’t worry, we won’t kill you. But perhaps you could help me. Zero: Help you? Who are you? Hexblade: I am the Hexblade of the Demonclaw Syndicate. Zero: ......Who? Hexblade: <_< Naesala: The point is, he came to Kilvas cause he was asking for my help. Hexblade: However, he claimed to be too busy. Naesala: Busy, lazy, it’s all the same. Hexblade: I figure that the two of you are probably good enough together to match Naesala’s skill. Zero: And why should we help you? Hexblade: Well, we can kill you for trespassing, I can kill you for fun, and I know where your sister is. Zero: .....Fine. Hexblade: You can only speak for yourself. Miss Bizz? Zero: Isn’t she- Bizz: Wah! *Hexblade slices the gag around Bizz’s mouth.* Zero: O_O Are you crazy?! Hexblade: Hm? Bizz: You nearly just cut my lips off you freak!!! Hexblade: Yes. I nearly did. But I didn’t. What do you say about joining me? Bizz: ....It’d be easier to make a decision when I’m not tied up. Hexblade: We tried that already remember? You can’t be trusted to be let go yet. I may just have you travel like that the whole trip. Bizz: O_O Hexblade: Your answer please? Bizz: <_< .....Fine. Hexblade: Good. Let’s go. Zero: Wait! Do me one favor! Hexblade: What? Zero: Can we stop by Serenes Forest? I want to see my sister. That’s the whole- Hexblade: That’s where we’re going. I have business there myself. We get going now. Bizz: What exactly are we doing? Hexblade: I’ll tell you on the way. *He picks up Bizz.* Bizz: O_O You can’t untie me? Hexblade: Not yet. Bizz: A little help Zero? Zero: Er. I’m not sure I can.... Hexblade: Best to just run with it for now Bizz. *The three of them walk out the door.* Naesala: Hm. That guy was able to figure out exactly when that Zero kid would barge in. He’s quite odd. Still, not really my problem. Guess I’ll get back to work. *He leans back in his chair and falls asleep.* To Be Continued(?) Next Episode: The Journey begins. Edited January 25, 2009 by Lyle Dayek Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phoenix Wright Posted September 14, 2008 Share Posted September 14, 2008 Very good Hexblade!! Its pretty interesting. Can I join? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mufasa Posted September 14, 2008 Author Share Posted September 14, 2008 (edited) Very good Hexblade!! Its pretty interesting.Can I join? Get a cooler name and maybe. No offense. And Thank you! Edited September 14, 2008 by Lyle Dayek Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phoenix Wright Posted September 14, 2008 Share Posted September 14, 2008 (edited) How about Chris? Or, a made-up name...like...Atomos?? BTW:Snake is always good right? What about Grey Fox...or Ocelot!? None taken I know it kinda sucks, I'm gonna change it. Edited September 14, 2008 by FEFL Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mufasa Posted September 14, 2008 Author Share Posted September 14, 2008 How about Chris? Or, a made-up name...like...Atomos??BTW:Snake is always good right? What about Grey Fox...or Ocelot!? None taken I know it kinda sucks, I'm gonna change it. Those work. I'm not sure about snake. but maybe Viper? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phoenix Wright Posted September 14, 2008 Share Posted September 14, 2008 (edited) Viper or Ocelot definently. Up to you now...(You can choose) Edited September 14, 2008 by FEFL Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mufasa Posted September 14, 2008 Author Share Posted September 14, 2008 Viper or Ocelot definently. Up to you now...(You can choose) How about: Ocelot the Viper? XD See, now that's a name that will get you on the most original name award. XD Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phoenix Wright Posted September 14, 2008 Share Posted September 14, 2008 Sure!! OtV it is!!(Not neccesarily OtV though, but Ocelot the Viper is good) Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mufasa Posted September 14, 2008 Author Share Posted September 14, 2008 Sure!! OtV it is!!(Not neccesarily OtV though, but Ocelot the Viper is good) Lol. I'm glad you like it. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phoenix Wright Posted September 14, 2008 Share Posted September 14, 2008 Dammit you had to reply to this right now!? I just sent you a comment XD Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mufasa Posted September 14, 2008 Author Share Posted September 14, 2008 Dammit you had to reply to this right now!? I just sent you a comment XD It would be nice if someone else read the chapter...... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mufasa Posted September 14, 2008 Author Share Posted September 14, 2008 *Bumps.* Also, Fireman wanted me to get one more post. So I figured I could bump this topic and fulfill his sick desires all in one post. ....... I'll have an update for the story in a couple days. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Masu Posted September 14, 2008 Share Posted September 14, 2008 ......... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mufasa Posted September 14, 2008 Author Share Posted September 14, 2008 ......... MMMYes? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Masu Posted September 14, 2008 Share Posted September 14, 2008 a post saying I have read. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mufasa Posted September 14, 2008 Author Share Posted September 14, 2008 a post saying I have read. Any comments on it? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TLSothe Posted September 14, 2008 Share Posted September 14, 2008 Fuck...Oh well, nice... :( Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mufasa Posted September 14, 2008 Author Share Posted September 14, 2008 Fuck...Oh well, nice... :( Huh? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TLSothe Posted September 14, 2008 Share Posted September 14, 2008 Huh? Hm, the whole stories with Serenes Members is kinda overdone, I was hoping for something original. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tino Posted September 14, 2008 Share Posted September 14, 2008 Meh. Too much dialogue. You should add some more actual text. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mufasa Posted September 14, 2008 Author Share Posted September 14, 2008 Hm, the whole stories with Serenes Members is kinda overdone, I was hoping for something original. Well, I try to do things differently. The entire series doesn't just revolve around Serenes members. Meh. Too much dialogue. You should add some more actual text. Hm. Well thanks for the criticism. I'm always looking for that. And I'll keep it in mind. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TLSothe Posted September 14, 2008 Share Posted September 14, 2008 Well, I try to do things differently. The entire series doesn't just revolve around Serenes members. Hm, well, I will watch this anxious Hexxy. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tino Posted September 14, 2008 Share Posted September 14, 2008 Sothe is here? Cool. You're welcome. And the "Meh" wasn't to offend you. Just saying. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TLSothe Posted September 14, 2008 Share Posted September 14, 2008 Sothe is here? Cool.You're welcome. And the "Meh" wasn't to offend you. Just saying. I'm omnipresent fool, yes, I am all over the WORLD! OMNIPRESENT! Erh..on most Fire Emblem Forums anyway. Meh, anyway, Hexxy won't take offense easily. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mufasa Posted September 14, 2008 Author Share Posted September 14, 2008 Sothe is here? Cool.You're welcome. And the "Meh" wasn't to offend you. Just saying. I know. I wasn't offended. XD Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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