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Solid fic so far, and I will be reading it. The two OCs in chapter 1 though, were they supposed to be the employers? Bystanders? I feel that the introduction of the bandits could've been done better. It felt like Rhys was remembering it rather than it happening right then and there. If that was the intention though, you're good.

I also have a Tellius based fic if you're interested, here.

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