Feedback for: A Murder of Ravens

[Moblin Major General]

This is a Feedback thread to A Murder of Ravens. Credit to Crazy Foxie for inspiring me to write this in my reading of The Wolf Complex. Please leave all comments in this thread.

[Dragoncat]

I'm not quite getting what's going on here, who put the poison in that wine? And why? Hopefully those questions will be answered, right?

On a less serious note, I love how you named one of those guards Crowe. Crow and Raven lol.

[Moblin Major General]

I'm not quite getting what's going on here, who put the poison in that wine? And why? Hopefully those questions will be answered, right?

On a less serious note, I love how you named one of those guards Crowe. Crow and Raven lol.

Crowe is Marquess Cornwell. He isn't named in Blazing Sword. Also, read Raven's supports with Lucius and Priscilla, and that will answer some of those unanswered questions.

[Crazy Foxie]

It was initially a bit hard to follow, but certainly once I got the gist of Blazing Sword as a story (not to mention what Raven even looked like!), the support conversations and reading it through again, I got a better idea.

With an ominous opening like that, it would only seem fair for Raven to want to seek revenge. Hopefully you'll explore it in later chapters, but is he meant to be close to his father/the House?

As a prologue though, it would be interesting to see what else you plan to do with this.

Edit: Forgot to mention thanks for the honourable mentions :) Just keep bashing out what's plaguing your mind and let the dramas snowball and spiral out of control!

Edited August 10, 2016 by Crazy Foxie