Nym Posted October 29, 2017 Share Posted October 29, 2017 (edited) This is the feedback thread for Serene Determination! If you have any comments if you find any grammar mistakes, please write them here :D For the story : https://serenesforest.net/forums/index.php?/topic/78904-serene-determination/ EDIT: Dragoncat suggested that I put a list of which members are in the story. So for what we got so far. Nym = Me of course Chloey = @TheSilentChloey Rezzy = @Rezzy Wolf: @Papa Wolf Rex = @Rex Glacies Clarina = She is based of the member Clarine but I did not ask permission to her directly and as such, she will stay a reference only. Arcanite: @Arcanite Kimberly: @Anime27Arts Other characters may have reference in their names only. Edited March 4, 2018 by Nym Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nym Posted November 16, 2017 Author Share Posted November 16, 2017 Forgot to write that the first chapter is now available. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Stephen the Great Posted November 16, 2017 Share Posted November 16, 2017 Good work so far. Who else do you plan to include? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nym Posted November 18, 2017 Author Share Posted November 18, 2017 On 16/11/2017 at 12:29 PM, Sigismund of Luxemburg said: Good work so far. Who else do you plan to include? That will be surprise but usually I ask a person who I think will have potiential. Except foe some special case like Clarina based of Clarine since Clarine already exist. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nym Posted November 20, 2017 Author Share Posted November 20, 2017 Chapter 2 is now available Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rex Glacies Posted November 22, 2017 Share Posted November 22, 2017 Hi Nym; sorry for being a bit late here, but I am curious about a few things before I begin reading the story. My main question is what relationship does this story have with "Skills"? I see that a few characters are the same between the stories (and in Serenesforest), so are they completely unrelated or is this story sort of a sequel to "Skills"? In other words, should I finish "Skills" before reading this one? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nym Posted November 22, 2017 Author Share Posted November 22, 2017 (edited) 43 minutes ago, Rex Glacies said: Hi Nym; sorry for being a bit late here, but I am curious about a few things before I begin reading the story. My main question is what relationship does this story have with "Skills"? I see that a few characters are the same between the stories (and in Serenesforest), so are they completely unrelated or is this story sort of a sequel to "Skills"? In other words, should I finish "Skills" before reading this one? They are completely unrelated whatsoever, only a few characters have the same name because well... they are based on us. No, you are not forced to finish ''Skills'' at all. You can read the story as you wish. Edited November 22, 2017 by Nym Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rex Glacies Posted November 22, 2017 Share Posted November 22, 2017 17 minutes ago, Nym said: They are completely unrelated whatsoever, only a few characters have the same name because well... they are based on us. No, you are not forced to finish ''Skills'' at all. You can read the story as you wish. Alrighty, thank you. I guess I can jump into this one at any time! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nym Posted November 22, 2017 Author Share Posted November 22, 2017 2 minutes ago, Rex Glacies said: Alrighty, thank you. I guess I can jump into this one at any time! Yup! Have fun ^__^ Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheSilentChloey Posted December 7, 2017 Share Posted December 7, 2017 I guess I'll just wait until the next chapter I am enjoying this little tale btw. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nym Posted December 16, 2017 Author Share Posted December 16, 2017 On 07/12/2017 at 5:16 AM, TheSilentChloey said: I guess I'll just wait until the next chapter I am enjoying this little tale btw. It's on his way :D, 80% complete Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pengaius Posted December 19, 2017 Share Posted December 19, 2017 Pacing a bit off as well as Nym utterly destroying fully trained knights 1V1 but throwaway enemies are to be expected at the start of a story. Otherwise good‚ lookin forward to next chapter Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nym Posted December 19, 2017 Author Share Posted December 19, 2017 2 hours ago, Pengaius said: Pacing a bit off as well as Nym utterly destroying fully trained knights 1V1 but throwaway enemies are to be expected at the start of a story. Otherwise good‚ lookin forward to next chapter To be fair, aside of the captain that guarded the door before the prisonners, Lenox and the unamed guards before him were part those lazy nobles that Klevik mentionned. Perhaps I should go on better details for the next chapter as why they are ''lazy''. But I won't throw that excuse all the time, nobles aren't that numberous anyway :P Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nym Posted March 3, 2018 Author Share Posted March 3, 2018 After a long break, I made another chapter. Sorry for the long wait. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dragoncat Posted March 4, 2018 Share Posted March 4, 2018 I got to the part where Nym is going to be made into a knight, looks good so far, only I'm wondering if Chloey shouldn't have been so quick to trust Nym and welcome him into their group just for beating up Lord Duran, maybe she should have made sure he was working on noble intentions and not just for glory? Is Lord Duran based on anybody? Also it might be helpful to have a list of what SF members are included. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nym Posted March 4, 2018 Author Share Posted March 4, 2018 41 minutes ago, Dragoncat said: I got to the part where Nym is going to be made into a knight, looks good so far, only I'm wondering if Chloey shouldn't have been so quick to trust Nym and welcome him into their group just for beating up Lord Duran, maybe she should have made sure he was working on noble intentions and not just for glory? You ask a very good question actually because someone WILL point that out to Chloey what you just said in the next chapter. 47 minutes ago, Dragoncat said: Is Lord Duran based on anybody? Also it might be helpful to have a list of what SF members are included. No he isn't. I could do that, thanks for the suggestion. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dragoncat Posted March 4, 2018 Share Posted March 4, 2018 One criticism I have is that the fight scenes seem to not last long enough, but I admit that they are difficult. I just got past the part where they sneak into the prison. Cracked a smile when Rezzy and Chloey tricked Lenox by offering a random hookup lol. Another thing: I'm not sure what this group's goals are. Overthrow a corrupt government? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nym Posted March 5, 2018 Author Share Posted March 5, 2018 1 hour ago, Dragoncat said: One criticism I have is that the fight scenes seem to not last long enough, but I admit that they are difficult. Umm, I admit I could add a few more lines. Keep in mind however that for now, they try to keep a low profile but you are still right. 1 hour ago, Dragoncat said: I just got past the part where they sneak into the prison. Cracked a smile when Rezzy and Chloey tricked Lenox by offering a random hookup lol. I'm glad to hear that! 1 hour ago, Dragoncat said: Another thing: I'm not sure what this group's goals are. Overthrow a corrupt government? Not... exactly. The only 'corrupt' part is the nobles' privilege. They are mostly fighting against the current situation that women are in and against noble privileges. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pengaius Posted April 15, 2018 Share Posted April 15, 2018 Good, good, the plot thickens. No complaints here Spoiler Spoiler Spoiler I sure hope those weren't poisoned daggers... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nym Posted April 15, 2018 Author Share Posted April 15, 2018 1 hour ago, Pengaius said: Good, good, the plot thickens. No complaints here Hide contents Hide contents Hide contents I sure hope those weren't poisoned daggers... Spoiler Rezzy is a good doctor ;) Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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