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FE Fates: A Dark Revelation Idea Prompt


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Hi there everyone! I’ve been doing a lot of thinking on a little project I’m making. I thought that for the most part, my rp for FE Fates: A Dark Path went well. So, I thought, hey?
Why not make it into a fanfic?
So, I decided to pool all of my ideas on to this post, and ask you guys whether they sound like good ideas to you all. I'm a fairly experienced fanfic writer in general, but I've really only done small-scale projects that go on for 15 or so chapters with 3000 words each. But never before have I truly delved into world-building, and I figured that now would be the time to do so. I do enjoy me some Fire Emblem.

 

Credit goes to NekoKnight for the original format of this questionnaire. Anyways

1. What routes are you working on? Is it an amalgamation of all three? Is it an alternate universe style retelling?
It is an AU of the Revelations plot. It will go through a total of 2 to 3 arcs.

2. What notable changes would you make to the plot?
Essentially, there will be major changes to the villains mostly, and who sides with who. The most obvious one is that Azura is going to be a major antagonist this time around, and directly serving Anankos.
There is also going to be a brief period of peace, with the majority of battles ending after a massacre in Crykensia. From then on, the story would establish its own canon, with multiple things ending up differently and with certain characters taking a much darker route.
Are problematic elements (the curse, the magic throne, the crystal ball, operation tears, Nohr and Hoshido being too black and white, everything Aqua does) going to be addressed?


The issues of the Vallite curse are going to be reworked this time around. In this fic, I’m going to have it that King Cadros, in a desperate attempt to seal Anankos, had gathered his most powerful mages to cast a seal upon Anankos.
Until the end of time would Anankos be sealed in Valla, as would the kingdom be sealed as well. The only people that could enter were Vallites themselves, and thus, only the royal family could unlock the bonds on Anankos.
Not only must they have royal blood, but they also must obtain a large amount of quintessence, the cultivation of every being.
You see, when a person dies, their quintessence is released back into the world. (Like in Fe7)


Anankos, (like Nergal in some ways), requires more quintessence to receive his full power and break the chains that restrict him to Valla, and with someone one of royal blood helping him to do so.
Iago’s personality is going to be shifted just a tad bit to make him seem more humane. He will be a radical advocate for the people, rationalizing that the only way to keep them alive is to invade the surrounding neutral countries. Thus, the people will begin to emphasize with him. In this fic, he desires to be king himself, and despises the Nohrian children who seem to be in the way of the throne. This will come at a head during Arc2, and during Xander’s succession to Garon, who is more focused on reestablishing stable political connections with the surrounding nations, and thus would gain support from them in due time.
The throne is well, being thrown out. I think its purpose is rather stupid in all honesty.

-Nohr and Hoshido are going to be more balanced out, with Nohr having legitimate reasons for doing what they did, and adding a few more corrupted Hoshidans and highlighting their selfish and racist tendencies.


Are there any themes to be communicated over each route?

If there were to be an overarching theme in the story, it would be the struggle of doing the “right” thing, even if the right thing may seem demonic by nature.
Another theme I plan to tackle is whether emotions are necessary to humans, and whether they cause more harm or good. Whether we would accomplish more if we shed what made us “human”.
What is the overall direction and "point" of each route?
There are going to be a total of 2 arcs, with a possible third arc. Arc 1 is going to be about drawing the war to a close and bringing peace between the nations, who have sworn that they fight for their own version of justice. Corrin would venture across Nohr and Hoshido trying to quell the rage of both nations.
The second arc is going to mainly focus on both kingdom's efforts to stop the new, emerging threat of Anankos, while dealing with the radical changes of leadership in the countries, as well the coups staged in both struggling nations.
3. What notable changes would you make to the characters?
What is Kamui all about (background, personality, abilities)?

Kamui is going to start out as a relatively naive character. Extremely upbeat and positive, brimming with energy, and has a bit of sass to her as well. In fact, she really won’t have any fantastic abilities in combat to start with either. She’ll be a mediocre leader as well.
So in general, she starts out like the regular Kamui in a lot of ways.


However, as time passes throughout the story, she will generally begin to mature and grow into her role as leader of the effort for peace. She’ll become a bit more modest and focused on her efforts, though she’ll still manage to keep that bit of sass and childlike vibrancy in her personality.
Things are pretty similar to the games at this point. Until she ages to 11, she closely bonds with her Hoshidan family and becomes a part of the royal family, but she is kidnapped by Garon and taken to Nohr.
There, Garon orders Iago to remove her memories of Hoshido, which is a long and painful process for Corrin. For 10 days did she spend in that dark dungeon, her mind feeling splintered afterward. She forgot the procedure though, and what had happened to her father on that day she was captured as well.
She was naught but a shell of herself afterward, her eyes glassy, and her body unmoving. Out of concern and pity, the Nohrian family had started to care for her and spend time with her.
Eventually, Kamui grew out of her tortured mind state as she began to bond with them, forming an especially close relationship with Leo, Elise, and her butler Jakob.
From there, things would progress normally through the plot, until she reached the age of 17.
As time had passed in her time throughout Nohr, Kamui had been having strange dreams about her time in Hoshido. However, no one would give her an answer for why she was having such dreams. Not her brothers and sisters, nor her butler would give her a straight answer.
This egged her on even further, and soon she began to remember. Remember her time at Hoshido, remember her father's death, and remember the torture Garon and Iago put her through.
She becomes angry at those who had kept such secrets from her, and demanded answers from her siblings, now stating that they had betrayed her trust. She even had the audacity to challenge Garon, stating that what he had done was wrong and immoral. For that, he had lashed out at her, slapping her face hard as he reminded him of her place to him.


This had been the final straw for Kamui. She had eventually given in to her curiosity, and ventured to Hoshido. And that is where our journey begins.  
What is Aqua all about (personality, role in the plot)?

Now, I would suppose it would be time to bring up the major difference in the room. That being Azura. Though I would be remiss if I started discussing her, without describing a new OC that would be very important to her backstory.

Dylan was but a simple boy in a local village near Krakenburg. King Garon’s harsh rule and desperate attempts to have everyone conform to his new will had gone poorly, and the people revolted. Thus, he ordered a squadron of his knights to raid the village and kill all of the men, leaving the women and children to be taken to his castle.
Garon, however, only brought them in as test subjects, now realizing that a war with Hoshido was imminent. He wanted to assure his victory in the war...He wanted to breed a powerful weapon he could use.
And the blood that was gifted to him from the “Great Dragon” was sure to make his weapon.
He then placed the people in his dungeons, and tasked Iago with experimenting on them with the dragon’s blood.
Some, had horrible results. They died, screaming in utter agony.
All but one boy survived the experiments. A young boy named Dylan.
He himself had finally become what Iago and Garon desired, the first manufactured dragon. Though, his form was different. His body had become warped in several places, and his mind had refused to progress past that of his younger years.
His transformations would grant him a large sum of strength, and yet they would deteriorate his mind until he regressed into a savage beast.
He was erased from Nohrian records, and promptly moved out of Nohr, abandoned and alone.
He had eventually made his way to Hoshido, where he was able to live his days in a relative exile, though he still bore the Hoshidans rumors about him day after day.
He would be ignored and mistreated by the Hoshidans, who would see him as a strange boy with even stranger powers. And this is how he came across someone that would change his life forever.

And thus, he finds a blue haired girl, crying to herself on the side of a ditch, with multiple injuries and a few scattered stones around her.
This girl is Azura.

Azura in this fic, would have been separated from her mother, who died during the defense of Valla after suddenly leaving Nohr to protect her birthplace. Thus, Azura is left in the only nation that would accept her, which is the kingdom of Nohr. Though, Azura begins to realize that the people had always hated her mother. The countless concubines that Garon had all held contempt and hatred for Arete, who had been the second queen after Katarina.
Essentially in this story, Azura would have been never treated well by the Nohrians or Hoshidans, their citizens treating her like she was a bane on the world itself.  Her Nohrian siblings had ignored her, due to the general hatred Arete people had, due to her marrying Garon but returning to Valla soon afterward.
Thus, they labeled her a demon spawn, and the concubines of this era saw her as a threat to the throne. So, they told their sons and daughters, like Leo, Camilla, and Xander to ignore her completely and not socialize with her under any circumstances. For 9 years, Azura lived a life of pain and sadness.
This is only accentuated when Corrin is brought into Nohr. Those small months before Azura was taken away to Hoshido, she sees the Nohrian siblings open up to Corrin, but not to her. They once again ignore her, and there were no search parties made for her when she disappeared into Hoshido.


And her time in Hoshido was no different. Only at the age of 11, she is subjected to such torture.  While her Hoshido siblings certainly were less cruel in that regard, the people were not. They labeled her as Nohrian Scum, calling her terrible things like...
"Nohrian slut...Wench...."
The insults were endless. They never stopped coming, and in Azura's mind, her siblings never stopped the citizens either. They would always make an excuse of some kind. Azura had finally had enough one day.
When a soldier kicked her to the ground, she retaliated. There were reports of numerous stab wounds on the man, even past his death.


The kind warm stares she received from Hinoka and Ryoma abruptly ended as they heard of what she did, and they had banished her to a remote shrine near a lake, and away from the people.


Abandoned and forgotten, she is forced to live a life of despair.

Thus, dark feelings start to take root in her heart. She slowly begins to curse and hate those that have abandoned her, and she begins to despise the very world itself. Though she does find one kind soul, one person that might change that.
His name was Dylan.
He felt Azura's pain and knew what she was going through, to an extent. He merely just wanted to make her feel better, so he hung out with her every day to make sure she wasn't lonely.
Thus, they developed a close relationship, though that relationship started to crack after a few years.
Dylan was a pacifist and never believed in vengeance and such. He and Azuar would argue about these subjects often. Though as time went on, the fights turned from small to big, and often ended with Azura leaving the shrine screaming at Dylan, saying that he was "siding with them", or that he was "weak".


Eventually, after a huge argument, Azura comes across the spring near her shrine. She is now 17 years old. She is despairing over the fact that Dylan doesn't see her point of view.
She sees a ripple in the water, getting into it for a moment.
She recalls a song she used to hear her mother sing, and a gate to Valla opens up. She walks through it and manages to be contacted by Anankos. Anankos then proclaims himself as Azura's true father and manipulates her into joining him.
He plays her like a violin, using her dark feelings and already growing insanity against her.
Thus, she begins to serve him and only him, out of her "love" for her father.


Azura then is given a choice by Anankos. He knows of a way for Dylan to see her way, and for him to not be eliminated.


Azura readily agrees, and she heads over to Dylan. She then tells him that...
"We'll be together soon, I promise. You don't need to worry about anything else darling...."
"It might be scary now...But soon it will all be over, and we can come back together again..."

A lance then goes through his heart as he crumples to the floor, and soon is reanimated as one of Anankos's soldiers.


What are the Hoshidan and Nohrian siblings all about (personalities, roles in the plot)?


Ryoma
Ryoma would play out a similar way to most of the Royals, being the main leader of the Hoshidan forces. While he himself is not outright racist towards Nohrians, he still contains a deep hatred for them. He often will blame them, as many Hoshidans do, for the calamity that befalls them and the world. He does label them as Nohrian beasts or dogs, stating that all they know is war and violence.
However, he is not completely resistant to change, and is willing to put aside his hatred for the greater good.

However, Ryoma’s importance will greatly differ in Arc 2, where he will have to deal with an uprising of the citizens of Hoshido for his hastiness in agreeing to peace with the Nohrians rather than engaging in the war and finishing them off.


Though in all honesty, there will be little difference between his canon version and this version though.


Xander
Xander will play a similar role to Ryoma, and holds a deep-seated hatred for the Hoshidans greed and vanity. Thus, he has no qualms about the tasks that Garon had him perform, for a while at least. Though Xander does have his limits, and he will resist some of the orders his Father will give if they disregard basic human rights. (Just like our favorite blonde Karl Marx in his OG game.)

Like Ryoma, he does not wish to see more bloodshed. And after the events of the massacre of Crykensia, he agrees with Ryoma to still hostilities.
This is a brief period of happiness for Nohr, and they slowly start to receive trades from the nations again. But the toll the war took on the people was too great. The nation’s already dwindling food supply is weakening, and the people are starving just as bad as they were before. 
This is only amplified in Arc 2, when king Garon is assassinated, and King Xander rises to the throne, only to be challenged to the throne by Iago.


Camilla


In this fic, while the character might be the same, I am planning to put a bit more emphasis on the female royal units.
Camilla, will of course, still be obsessive about keeping stability and order within her family, taking the role of the overbearing mother. Obviously, like many good FE theorists say, Camilla obviously does this to make up for the fact that her mother had only used her as a pawn to get closer to King Garon.
However, when Kamui begins to act out more, asking question after question about her life in Hoshido, Camilla tries to shut down her questions. She wants to keep that stability going, as it is the only thing keeping HER stability going.


Things only escalate when Kamui starts to hound her father, and eventually gets put down by it. And eventually, when Kamui escapes to Hoshido, Camilla begins to lose her grip on her sanity. Her own guilt crashes in on herself, drowning her in depression. She blames herself for why Kamui had turned against them, choosing to side with nobody.


Leo
Leo himself will have an interesting relationship with Kamui. The two would often disagree a lot on how one would wish to rule a kingdom. Leo prefers a ruling system that gets results and is stable, and Kamui prefers one were the people are happy.
Often, though Leo is the younger of the two, he often teases and makes snide remarks about Kamui’s relatively naive nature and childish antics.
Kamui gets upset at this, but she typically lets it go after a few seconds.


Though they bicker at times, Leo and Corrin hold the strongest bond with one another, just as they both do with Elise. I suppose you could say that they as younger siblings are closer than with Camilla and Xander.
Takumi
Takumi would play a role similarly to his old one, with him completely being driven by his hatred. He would, of course, be heavily skeptical of Corrin’s arriving, and often has arguments about his elder sibling’s reliance on peace tactics. This comes to a head on the Plains of Hoshido, where the two sides meet. Corrin manages to negotiate between the two to lower their weapons, and Ryoma and Xander agree. And just as things are going to end favorably, Takumi let’s loose an arrow at Elise, claiming that she was just a Nohrian snake, this all being against Ryoma’s orders.
This cancels any compassion Nohr had for Hoshido, as it now reignites the battle they had begun long ago.

After the initial fight, Ryoma and Hinoka are angered by his tactics. Takumi is hereby banished from the royal throne, and thus he feels betrayed by his family. He feels that HE is more Hoshidan than any of his brother’s or sisters. He thinks that they should be fighting Bohr his way.
This only accelerates during Arc 2, during Ryoma’s ascension to the king of Hoshido. Ryoma agreed with Xander and Corrin to cease hostilities. 
However, not only was Takumi angered by this...but so were the people. They wanted revenge for the murder of their king and queen, and yet the king would agree to a draw that would have them SHARING resources with the ENEMY!? 
Takumi too desired this. He had eventually started to gain support, delivering speeches in direct opposition to his elder brother and sister. He slowly became the favored king of Hoshido, rather than Ryoma. And so this would start a new revolution within Hoshido.


What is Garon, Mikoto, Lilith or any other important character all about?
Garon will largely play the same role as the canon game, however, he is the one true Garon still. And though he still comes off as cold to his children, he is sympathetic to all of his children aside from Corrin, of whom he perceives as unworthy of his family name.
He has ties to Anankos, though he tries to sever those ties at the end of Arc 1. This backfires though and leads to his own demise at the hands of Iago and Azura.
When he is assassinated in Arc 2, he thus passes all the hatred tied to his name onto Xander, something the crown prince struggles to amend.


What is Hydra all about (role in the plot)?
Anankos is still the major boss and puppet master of the events. His goal is to release the binds that have been placed on him, and the only way to do that is with quintessence, and a Vallite royal, which he already has in the form of Azura. That is why he subtly influences others to further the war efforts and make it continue, rather than stop.
What changes will be made to minor characters
I plan on bringing more significance to the Hoshidan characters like Hana, perhaps having all people in Hoshido under a certain class have the same master. Like perhaps Ryoma and Hana trained under the same man or woman?

4. What notable changes would you make to the setting?
What ideas do you have for world building?
I intend to have more emphasis on the middle kingdoms, such as Izumo, Mokushu, Cykrensia, and Nestra. They will play into the politics of the countries heavily, with some allying with a nation, and some banding together to fight both.
What kind of history does this continent have?
The history and lore of the game will also largely be the same. I am also naming the world of Fates Dividire, which means “to force apart, cleave, or distribute”.


What is the balance of natural and supernatural elements?
The world of fates will rely heavily on magical elements, though I hope to bring out the gritty and hell like life that one would suffer on the battlefield. As such, the initial war will last for nearly 3 years until the massacre of Crykensia would stop it.
Are the Faceless and invisible enemies in your story?
The Faceless are being edited out of the story, but invisible enemies are going to continue throughout it as parts of Anankos forces.
5. Do any characters die?
Actually yes, a lot frankly. While in the first Arc, character death will be at a minimum, aside from possibly one person, the second Arc is a whole different story. All in all, it will take a much darker tone, and as such, the ending will have multiple...and possibly all the main units dying. Only a few may end up surviving against Anankos.
Some examples will be of course Mikoto, Juliana, Dylan, some of the retainers, and possibly some of the royal units.
6. Do you introduce any new characters?
Yes. There are going to be a total of 4 new characters. 3 are Hoshidan characters, and 1 is a new villain.
Kaguya- Samurai
A close confidant and trusted friend to Ryoma. Both have trained under Asami, along with Hana as well during their younger years. She is loyal to a fault, stubborn, and dedicated but easily flustered. She is also fierce rivals with Hana, whom she has held a grudge with for many years.
Asami- Swordmaster
A quiet and strict master of the sword. Hailing from the destroyed village of Kohga, Asami is a feared and renowned swordfighter, only matching in skill with Sumeragi. she had been asked to teach his son and his people her ways, and she reluctantly agreed. She has currently taught 3 students, and finds Kaguya to be the most adept with the skill. She secretly hopes for the day to confront Kotaro and end his life, satisfying her revenge for what he did to her people. 
Mahiru- Pegasus Knight
An easy-going, mischievous, and loud-mouthed Pegasus Knight. Mahiru often doesn't hesitate to speak her mind, and will often do so at any point she wishes. She has developed a close relationship with Takumi as not only his retainer, but as one of his few close friends.
Dylan- ???
A young man of unknown origin. He seems to hold some close connection to Azura, and seems unfazed by her wicked plans as he stands by her. His intentions are unclear, and he seems to hold some power within him. As if he was human, but not human....
7. Are any characters going to be cut?
Yes. For the purposes of cutting extra, unneeded characters, I am planning on cutting Setsuna, Hinata, Oboro, Peri, Kagero, Felicia,  Arthur, Lilith, Hans, and other characters.

Pretty much in all, I hope that this story will take the actual world, war, and story of these character to a more life-like and gritty degree. Characters will not only have to overcome their own demons, but their inner demons as well. Regret, anguish, control, savagery, and, most of all….tolerance. 


And yeah, that was pretty much what I was thinking about this. Please comment down below on any suggestions or thoughts you had about these ideas. What you liked, disliked, all of it. I'm eager to get a discussion going. :)

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An interesting concept…I'm looking forward to seeing it, though don't think I didn't notice you skipped both younger sisters in your explanation of the siblings. I assume this was because they don't take as large a role in the story?

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