MisterIceTeaPeach Posted June 9, 2020 Share Posted June 9, 2020 Teehee, this was a fun chapter. I think it's early to judge about your own writing. We know only a little about Musse in CSIII so far. We mainly know her as a student in class VII. About her behavior in private life there was like one cutscene. She knows about lots of thing going on in Erebonia in pre- and background, but she does not share them at once. She's a characters full of mysteries. After all the writing is accurate to her behavior as student imo. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DragonFlames Posted June 9, 2020 Share Posted June 9, 2020 (edited) 10 hours ago, Shrimperor said: yeah i try to do that^^ I think it also has to do with the weird way i write, mainly i imagine the 'character's voice' in my head and see if it fits the character or not, and with Musse i am usually like ''it could fit, not sure though'' xD yeah i am weird xD Thanks for the tips, still^^ No problem! Always happy to help out! I stand by my opinion that I love this story. It's great! Edited June 9, 2020 by DragonFlames Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shrimpica Posted June 9, 2020 Author Share Posted June 9, 2020 (edited) Thanks, all of you^^. Anyway, let's get this show started. OST: Inevitable Struggle Chapter 11: The Death Knight I cast Cross Crusade at a group of enemies from behind cover. From the other side i see His Highness doing the same. A strange group of enemies. A mix of mechanized infantry and beasts. I am thankful that i went to ask Tita & Olivier for help, and that Agate is helping us. That way we are able to go all out. Otherwise we would have been severly outgunned. Literally, thanks to the enemy having access to much higher levels of technology than what we saw in Fodlan. But even these weapons are no match for our orbal ones. I use my rifle to take out a small robot that wanted to flank his highness, who's casting Galion Fort at a group of beasts. I see Tita supporting Agate, who's locked in combat with the enemy commander, a masked knight on a mount. She defeats another group of enemies that try to flank him. Yet she is also getting flanked. I move to hide behind another pillar, and use Oiseau Bleu to freeze those enemies in their tracks. We push into the enemy group and move towards our objective, the mage standing infront of the sealed grave. We need to take him out before he unseals it. ''So that's why they gave us these strange reinforcements.'' The masked knight says, ''You four have some strange weapons yourself.'' ''Nothing out of the ordinary compared to the ones you are leading.'' Answers His Highness, who finished dealing with the beasts. ''Wanna tell us what your objective is?'' The knight doesn't aswer. More enemy reinforcements appear. Robots and worm like beasts who dug themselves out of the ground. I move behind one of the pillars once again and start casting. The strongest space Art i have access to. The knight notices this and starts moving towards me. But Agate is in his way. The others are defending me as well. For that Art's cast time is long. Enemy gun shot is countered by Olivier's gun shot. Tita hits multipe enemies at once with her weapon of choice. Agate blocks a strike meant for her, and counters. I feel his highness linking his Arcus unit with mine. He is preparing to support my Art. Agate slashes at the Knight and pushes him back. His Highness uses Quick Draw to unbalance a worm like beast preparing to attack me. And that's all the time i need. I cast it. The currently known strongest space Art. ''Seventh Caliber!'' From above, multi-colored swords of light fall down an all enemies. And except for the knight and the Mage infront of the sealed grave, they all fall. Yet that mage is quickly dealt with using my orbal rifle. ''So, Sir masked knight,'' I speak to him with a smile, ''ready to surrender?'' He answers with a Slash that Agate blocks. Playing hard to get, i see. But with the four of us, we will undoubtly defeat him. The knight tries to use magic to get away from us, yet Tita's orbal cannon scared the mount and makes it spiral out of control. And Agate proceeds to unmount and disarm the knight. Before we try to capture him... ''Phony Prince, watch out!'' What? I hear the sound of weapons clashing. I look to where it came from, and see Agate blocking a strike meant for His Highness. Another masked person. Without another word, the masked person takes the defeated knight and teleports away. ''We should probably leave as well,'' Tita says, ''We can't be seen using our weapons, and the knights of the church will arrive sooner or later. Especially with all that noise.'' We already hear people coming from above. ''Come with me.'' Agate says and he shows us a way out. Different from the one we came in from. A way that takes us to an underground city. ''Welcome to Abyss.'' Agate welcomes us to said city, ''I will show you the way outside. You need to return to your classmates so you don't seem suspicous.'' After we hide our weapons, i return to the Holy Mausoleum, where my class is investigating the fight that just took place a few minutes ago. Abyss, was it? After the whole investigation is over and i have some time, i should... Choice 1: explore it and see what Agate has been up to. Choice 2: forget about it. Edited June 9, 2020 by Shrimperor Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DragonFlames Posted June 9, 2020 Share Posted June 9, 2020 6 minutes ago, Shrimperor said: A strange group of enemies. A mix of mechanized infantry and beasts. Archaisms AND Demonic Beasts? Holy crap! If that was an actual thing during that chapter in Three Houses, we would have been screwed. Severely. 7 minutes ago, Shrimperor said: use Oiseau Bleu Me in every battle, every time. Mostly because I thought up a really stupid way to pronounce it and I kept saying it every time I used it (something like Woosow Blue). It became my own personal meme. XD Hype battle scene! And with that music, it became even more hype! Looking forward to seeing how this continues! And of course we'll explore the Abyss. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shrimpica Posted June 9, 2020 Author Share Posted June 9, 2020 1 minute ago, DragonFlames said: Archaisms Well, they aren't Archaisms. Musse would've recognized them otherwise 😉 But Mole peeps had access to high tech in 3H as well, so i am using that. 2 minutes ago, DragonFlames said: Woosow Blue Warsaw Blue xD Well, i don't blame you. French is hard. If Oiseau is even french xD Also, poll is up 😉 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DragonFlames Posted June 9, 2020 Share Posted June 9, 2020 (edited) 8 minutes ago, Shrimperor said: Well, they aren't Archaisms. Musse would've recognized them otherwise 😉 But Mole peeps had access to high tech in 3H as well, so i am using that. Oh right! I just assumed due to the involvement of the Snake Buddies that those machines were Archaisms.Brain fart. XP 8 minutes ago, Shrimperor said: Warsaw Blue xD Ha! Nice! XD 8 minutes ago, Shrimperor said: Well, i don't blame you. French is hard. If Oiseau is even french xD It is. That attack name means "Blue Bird" in French. And believe it or not, I can pronounce it (luckily, those four years of French class weren't all wasted), but the first time I said that name out loud, I somehow butchered it into roughly what I said above and it stuck throughout the whole game, because of how dumb it was. XD And I voted already! Edited June 9, 2020 by DragonFlames Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shrimpica Posted June 9, 2020 Author Share Posted June 9, 2020 (edited) 11 minutes ago, DragonFlames said: luckily, those four years of French class weren't all wasted The only stuff i remember from french class are the numbers xD 11 minutes ago, DragonFlames said: Oh right! I just assumed due to the involvement of the Snake Buddies that those machines were Archaisms. Snake buddies is what let to this being different than normal 3H. Notice DK's bolded 'They' Edited June 9, 2020 by Shrimperor Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DragonFlames Posted June 9, 2020 Share Posted June 9, 2020 (edited) 15 minutes ago, Shrimperor said: The only stuff i remember from french class are the numbers xD I actually forgot those. Past ten, it's all a blur. And even everything up to ten, I have to really try hard to remember. 15 minutes ago, Shrimperor said: Snake buddies is what let to this being different than normal 3H. Notice DK's bolded 'They' Oh, I noticed. You know what's weird? I'm much more hyped for Snake Buddies in this than I was in CS2 and 3. XD Edited June 9, 2020 by DragonFlames Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shrimpica Posted June 9, 2020 Author Share Posted June 9, 2020 2 minutes ago, DragonFlames said: I actually forgot those. Past ten, it's all a blur. And even everything up to ten, I have to think about i still remember them because they were...different from all other languages i speak xD example: 84 - quatre-vingt-quatre. Which translated to 4-20-4. As in 4 x 20 + 4 xD 3 minutes ago, DragonFlames said: You know what's weird? I'm much more hyped for Snake Buddies in this than I was in CS2 and 3. XD ...i hope i don't dissapoint then. I definetly have some plans for them Hopefully it all works out xd But yeah, Campy made Agartha react a bit different as we saw this chapter^^ Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DragonFlames Posted June 9, 2020 Share Posted June 9, 2020 2 minutes ago, Shrimperor said: i still remember them because they were...different from all other languages i speak xD example: 84 - quatre-vingt-quatre. Which translated to 4-20-4. As in 4 x 20 + 4 xD Oh right. Now I remember. When that came on in a test, I distinctly remember failing it outright. XD 3 minutes ago, Shrimperor said: ...i hope i don't dissapoint then. I definetly have some plans for them Hopefully it all works out xd But yeah, Campy made Agartha react a bit different as we saw this chapter^^ I have faith! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MisterIceTeaPeach Posted June 12, 2020 Share Posted June 12, 2020 First of all sorry for not having posting here lately! Several things have kept me busy, so I had little opportunity to read and vote. Latest chapter tends to get really intense. Of course I want to know more about the Abyss. Abyss could also be Spoiler Gehanna... the worst place ever Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shrimpica Posted July 7, 2020 Author Share Posted July 7, 2020 (edited) Sorry for the long wait, everyone... I just haven't been in the mood to write lately. I will try and make atleast weekly updates from now on. 6 QP get! Anyway, let's continue! Chapter 12: The Gates of Hell Old People. Sick people. Poor people. That's what the underground city, Abyss, is filled with. After escaping through it last time, me and the others decided to visit it, to collect information and to see how it is. And to check up on Agate. Expectedly, people are looking at us. Surface dwellers, they call us. ''So you are Agate's friends,'' a purple haired boy approaches us, ''I am Yuri, and i welcome you all to the Ashen Wolves class!'' The Ashen Wolves. A class made up of four Students. Yuri, Hapi, Constance and Balthus. I wonder what drove them underground. They must've their reasons. What i am sure of however, is that this Yuri guy is a shrewd person. I don't need to interact with him much to know that. ''So, Agate, why don't you introduce your friends?'' Yuri asks. ''Green hair is Musse, Phony blone is Olivier and the brat is Tita.'' Agate responds. ''So you're Tita,'' the red hair of the class, Hapi, appears beside Tita, ''Agy can't stop talking about you, you know?'' Agy? ''Agy?'' Tita mirros my thoughts, blushing. ''Don't worry little girl,'' a giant of a man appears, Balthus, ''She ain't stealing your man away. She calls everyone by a nickname.'' And she blushes even harder. ''Hey, Muscle head, don't even joke about that.'' And Agate stops the teasing. ''You didn't tell us you were friends with Nobles though, Agate.'' The last member of the Wolves, Constance, arrives. Oh? ''Nah, they aren't Nobles. We just used to interact with Nobles alot as part of the Merchant Caravan we belonged to.'' And Agate responds with our cover story. ''Merchant Caravan? Interesting.'' Yuri mutters to himself. ''Anyway, i will show them around, as i told you all earlier.'' Agate tells them. ''No problem!'' ''Have fun!'' ''Don't do anything we wouldn't do'' And Wolves respond. And so Agate shows us the underground city. The people who belong to a different religion, the Classroom, the tavern where they all meet and... The Library. The Library that has alot of information that's not available on the surface. But it isn't just information, but... I hear a gasp from Tita. ''Those things... Don't they belong to them?'' She asks. ''That's what i was asking myself as well.'' And Agate shows us the two items. A Bracer Badge and a Gralsritter Badge. Two items that confirm that Zemurians have some connections to this continent. ''But that isn't everything.'' He continues. ''There's more?'' Asks Olivier. ''Come with me.'' And he leads us further in Abyss. He leads us to Giant Gates. Giant Gates that Olivier and Tita definetly recognize, going by the shocked looks on their faces. ''Why are you all so shocked?'' I ask them, ''You recognize these Gates?'' ''Musse,'' Tita starts, ''These Gates are...'' ''The Gates to Gehenna.'' Olivier finishes the sentence. What? And how do they even know what they look like? And why does something like that even exist over here? ''What do you think, everyone, should we investigate this further now?'' Agate asks. We definetly... Choice 1: Should investigate and try to open the Gates. Choice 2: Should leave this alone for now and return to the surface. Edited July 7, 2020 by Shrimperor Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DragonFlames Posted July 7, 2020 Share Posted July 7, 2020 (edited) 8 minutes ago, Shrimperor said: ''Agy?'' Tita mirros my thoughts, blushing. ''Don't worry little girl,'' a giant of a man appears, Balthus, ''She ain't stealing your man away. She calls everyone by a nickname.'' And she blushes even harder. ''Hey, Muscle head, don't even joke about that.'' And Agate stops the teasing. It continues! XD 8 minutes ago, Shrimperor said: ''Those things... Don't they belong to them?'' She asks. ''That's what i was asking myself as well.'' And Agate shows the two items to us. A Bracer Badge and a Gralsritter Badge. Two items that confirm that Zemurians had some connections to this continent. Mysterious. Mysterious indeed... 8 minutes ago, Shrimperor said: ''The Gates to Gehenna.'' That sounds nice. Like sunshine and rainbows. My gamer and explorer spirit says to investigate, but my safety spirit says to get the heck out of dodge before catching a case of the terminal life stoppage. I've learned my lesson last time, so I say we stay away for now until we know more about this. Very glad to see this back! And very interested to see where it goes! I liked this chapter! Keep it up! Edited July 7, 2020 by DragonFlames Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shrimpica Posted July 7, 2020 Author Share Posted July 7, 2020 Poll is up btw @DragonFlames ^^ 2 minutes ago, DragonFlames said: It continues! XD Gotta tease the Loligineer xD Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DragonFlames Posted July 7, 2020 Share Posted July 7, 2020 Just now, Shrimperor said: Poll is up btw @DragonFlames ^^ And voted! Just now, Shrimperor said: Gotta tease the Loligineer xD Even in another world/country, poor Tita can't catch a break. XD Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Karimlan Posted July 7, 2020 Share Posted July 7, 2020 16 minutes ago, Shrimperor said: What i am sure of however, is that Yuri, is a shrew person. I don't need to interact with him to know that. Is the italicized word supposed to be shrewd? Voted too 😄 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shrimpica Posted July 7, 2020 Author Share Posted July 7, 2020 1 minute ago, Karimlan said: Is the italicized word supposed to be shrewd? I corrected it (and some other typos, too) 😉 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shrimpica Posted July 9, 2020 Author Share Posted July 9, 2020 (edited) Bad End 2: Hell I feel them callig to me, the Gates. ''We should probably leave them alone for now!'' I hear Olivier saying, yet i am already determined to investigate the gates. ''Hey Musse, where are you going?'' Tita calls out to me, yet i ignore her. I run to the gates. Someone is trying to stop me, but they fail. I touch the gates and... FIRE MEMORIES MANIPULATION TIME PAIN FIRE MEMORIES MANIPULATION TIME PAIN FIRE MEMORIES MANIPULATION TIME PAIN FIRE MEMORIES MANIPULATION TIME PAIN FIRE MEMORIES MANIPULATION TIME PAIN FIRE MEMORIES MANIPULATION TIME PAIN FIRE MEMORIES MANIPULATION TIME PAIN FIRE MEMORIES MANIPULATION TIME PAIN FIRE MEMORIES MANIPULATION TIME PAIN FIRE MEMORIES MANIPULATION TIME PAIN FIRE MEMORIES MANIPULATION TIME PAIN F̷̮̗͙͚̳͔̙̞͇̻̌͆̊̍̓̕͜ͅỈ̵̢̪͈͂͠R̷̤̹̹̘̞̞̹͇̈̆͗͑͑͛͠ͅÉ̷̱̞͈͌̄̓̄͊̏͘̚͠ ̵͓̠̩̳̯͆̊̆̓͌͠M̷͈̙̗̾̔̔͌͆̽̐̀͂͘͝͝Ë̶̤̱̟̠̳̖̘͔̩̫̗̓̌̆̎̂͊͘͜͝͝͠M̶̛̞̭̮͖̦͈͜ͅÕ̵͇̖̮̲̤̘̘̼̀̿̊̎́̃̈͠R̸̘͌̏̆̈́͒̊̾̕Í̴̩͙̫̺̭͇͂͆̍̓̈́̊̎̀̀̇͘͝Ë̸͉͉̥̹̞̗͊͛̇͌͋͘S̴̤͉̤͉͇͙̱̏̀̍̑̈́͒̉̔̒̀́̈̄͝ͅ ̷͔͑͂M̸̨̢̢̺͉̞͉͓͓̩̫̜̯̤̑͊͊͝ͅA̷̧̞̦̟̗̝̭̱̖̜̝͍͗͂́̊͆̋̿͘͜N̵̡̦͓̗͕͒I̵̢͖̞͎̼̪͈̥̪̓́̍́̈͒̓͒̚͝͝ͅP̴͈͎̭̫̼̪̮̘̤͎̬͎͎̆͊̎̂͆̔̔̒U̷̧͔̲̖̫̱͔̟͈̦͔͑͊͊͗̎L̷̨̧̨̛̘̘̖̘̤̬͉̱̲͙̇̀͐͝A̴̧͉͚͚̬̜͕̜̜̫͒̍̈̊́̂̽͘̚̕̚͝T̸̢̽̌̊͆̋̀́͛͗̀̉̔̚͝I̴̘̱̣̹̤͑̒͌̈́͊Ǫ̴̮̟̹̙̖͔̟͉̪̺͓͍̊̐̀͊͛ͅN̴̛̻̦̙̙̺̣̙͕̗̮̙͇̗̙͗̽̀̽͒̂̇̈́͊̿ ̸̛̪͈̟̩̜̳͚͚̗̜͖̜̟̦͂T̴̯͓̘̦͖͕͓̪̠̀͐́̎̉͘͠͝ͅĮ̶̯̦͂̿M̴̯̺̱̠̝̗͇̤̟͍͕͍̹̣͔͌͗̈́̌͛͝E̸̢̛̖̺̪̺̰̯̱̯͓͙͚͖͐͗̉̂́̃̀̎̆̀͘ ̵̢̨̛͇̗͚̺̙͔͕̬̤̹͙̲͚͌̐P̴̮͉̣̬̙̹̙̰̗̞͉̋̌̇̀͋͛͆͛̒̇̐͆̚͝͠Ä̴̛̯̪̱̳́̓̃͐̊́̍͌̔̈́̍̈̕I̴̢̳̺͙̠̅̏N̵̥̪̘̞͖̥͈̝̩̦͑̊̆͛̌͜͝ ̸̧̨̡̡̦̦͎͙̻̞̹̗̓̂̓̊́̂͠͝ I arrive at a hot place. So hot that my skin burns. It hurts. I see them. The ones who hurt me. The ones i have lied to. The ones i have manipulated. They are all looking at me. Eyes burning with hatred. Family. Nobles. Schoolmates. Elise. Alfin. Ash. Altina. Juna. Kurt. Tita. Olivier. Agate. Rean. No. No. NO. NOOOOOOOOO. ''Why are you all looking at me like this.'' I scream to them. But i get no answer. All i see is the flames sorrounding me and the hate in everyone's eyes. I take a look at my hands and all i see are... The hands of an hideous monster. Of a demon. Of a being straight out of Gehenna. ''Flames, scatter on my blade!'' I hear his voice. A voice i thought belonged to the person that would one day save me from my life filled with pain and lies. Yet hearing that voice now only brings fear in my heart. For that person's blade will condemn me to eternal flames. But i know i don't deserve any better. For i never tried to gain that person's trust. I only tried to manipulate him. I only tried to manipulate them all. And the Hero's blade destroys the demon's wicked heart. Bad End 2, Fin. Nothing to see here but a girl breaking down. Edited July 9, 2020 by Shrimperor Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DragonFlames Posted July 9, 2020 Share Posted July 9, 2020 Oh wow! Well... that was... wow... On one hand, I am sad we got another bad end (Musse death counter: 2), on the other hand, this was dope af. Really awesome bad end! 👍👍👍 Is it bad that I saw the animation of that certain attack when the words "Flames, scatter on my blade" came up? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shrimpica Posted July 9, 2020 Author Share Posted July 9, 2020 8 minutes ago, DragonFlames said: Really awesome bad end! 👍👍👍 Thanks^^ 8 minutes ago, DragonFlames said: Is it bad that I saw the animation of that certain attack when the words "Flames, scatter on my blade" came up? nah, that was the intention xD 9 minutes ago, DragonFlames said: Musse death counter: 2 How many more Musses will die, i wonder? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DragonFlames Posted July 9, 2020 Share Posted July 9, 2020 1 minute ago, Shrimperor said: nah, that was the intention xD Nice! 1 minute ago, Shrimperor said: How many more Musses will die, i wonder? *insert nonfunny "over 9,000" meme here* Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
null Posted July 9, 2020 Share Posted July 9, 2020 2 hours ago, Shrimperor said: Bad End 2, Fin. Nothing to see here but a girl breaking down. Now that's how you do a bad ending. Great work! Sorry I missed out on the last update. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shrimpica Posted July 9, 2020 Author Share Posted July 9, 2020 1 minute ago, twilitfalchion said: Now that's how you do a bad ending. Great work! Thanks! 1 minute ago, twilitfalchion said: Sorry I missed out on the last update. Npnp^^ I haven't written a thing in a big while anyway xD Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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