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This was pretty sweet! I would have added some hints on the eventual canon ship here. Like, maybe when Marth sees Shiida in her nightgown, he has some sort of slightly horny thought and pushes it out of his mind? Something like "She's gorgeous, and that nightgown shows it"

I wrote a similar oneshot with Dimitri and Ingrid. Like, very similar in concept to this! You'll see what I mean by hinting at the ship there, subtle, but clear.

https://forums.serenesforest.net/index.php?/topic/90818-its-dark-insidethree-houses-song-inspired/

EDIT - I saw you hinted at the ship toward the end now, I must have missed that. Still a sweet piece.

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1 hour ago, twilitfalchion said:

Thanks for reading and commenting! I've read a lot of fanfics, both good and bad, and I definitely didn't want to make the romance aspect cringey. That's a problem that seems to plague a lot of stories in the romance genre. It's why I felt a more subtle approach to mentioning the ship was appropriate, especially for Marth and Shiida as characters. I like how you hinted at the romance between Dimitri and Ingrid as well in your story!

No problem and understood! And thanks!

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