I feel like the revised version would be better with the last two parts removed.
That sounds fine to me. At least get rid of "In anything!", it just sounds awkward.
1400 even. I got to like 1550 or something really early in the season, then just stopped playing and let it decay and never bothered to raise it back up.
That's just how Ashe plays. I usually get very few kills on her either. Your biggest contribution is permaslow and your ultimate along with some ranged damage that doesn't really become impressive until you have 4+ items.