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Lux, if you aren't gonna EA, Support write.

... What what are you talking about I'm a suckish writer.

And I'll EA when YOU finish the text.

[spoiler=what I have so far, but A is BS. B and C have so far been approved by Kit so those are fine]

C:

Inari: Hey, you! You don't belong out here, I'm supposed to be the black-haired swordfighter girl of this army!

Lumi:… I’m pretty sure I was here before you.

Inari: Huh. Still, this is my job.

Lumi: There’s no rule against two black-haired swordswomen fighting on the same side, is there?

Inari: S---

Lumi: Behind you!

Inari: Wh- *turns, dodges, kills enemy*

Lumi: Hm. Not bad. Care for a spar sometimes?

Inari: You set the date.

Lumi: In three days time, then.

Inari: Don’t stand me up!

Lumi: I won’t. In the mean time, don’t die on me.

Inari: Hah! As if!

B:

Inari: You from the other day! I have come for our spar!

Lumi: Name’s Luminis. Lumi for short…Excellent. Let’s begin. *lunges*

Inari: !*dodges, but barely**counters*

Lumi: *dodges, attacks again*

Inari: *dodges, counters*

Lumi: -dodges, but the end of her shoulder-pad was chipped off-

Lumi: Impressive… to be able to chip off parts of my armor like that.

Inari: Hah! And why do you even wear armor anyway? Shouldn’t us swordfighters be able to dodge everything?

Lumi: I am not so dependent on my dodging skills that if I were to be hit, I would still be able to take the hit and move on.

Inari: Huh.

Lumi: Anyway, I still have not gotten your name.

Inari: Inari.

Lumi: Well, I better get my armor repaired before the battle. See you around, Inari. *leaves*

Inari: Hm. I’d best get prepared, as well.

A:

Inari: *jump attack*

Lumi: -Turns and dodges- What was that for?

Inari: To see if you’re prepared or not.

Lumi: I’m alert at all times. Been trained that way since I was a little.

Inari: So you’re from a mercenary family or something?

Lumi: N—

Inari: Funny, you don’t look it.

Lumi: Th—

Inari: Your armor is way too ornate for a mercenary’s.

Lumi: Y—

Inari: Looks more like a noble’s too me. Huh. But you don’t talk like a stereotypical noble.

Lumi: Why should I talk like them? Too stuffy and serious. And if you’d let me get a word in, I’m not a mercenary.

Inari: Eh? Then what are you?

Lumi: Just some traveler from some place.

---and unfinished.

I may change A entirely depending on what people on FEM say, Kit might have an idea. For now it's all BS and I feel it's a bit disconnected from C and B.

Critiquing enclosed in the spoiler...

C support

-How are you gonna show that one killing an enemy?

-Sometime, not sometimes

-Meantime is one word

B support

-Only critique is again, how are you gonna show this battle? (I know a way if you want me to chip in)

A support

-Well, it doesn't really connect, as you said. A supports are usually the "confession time. let's be best friends/lovers yay" scripts. So you should try something like: "why did you take up swordfighting?" or have them reveal their pasts. I don't know much about either character, so I can't provide proper perspective on a model conversation.

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Critiquing enclosed in the spoiler...

C support

-How are you gonna show that one killing an enemy?

-Sometime, not sometimes

-Meantime is one word

B support

-Only critique is again, how are you gonna show this battle? (I know a way if you want me to chip in)

A support

-Well, it doesn't really connect, as you said. A supports are usually the "confession time. let's be best friends/lovers yay" scripts. So you should try something like: "why did you take up swordfighting?" or have them reveal their pasts. I don't know much about either character, so I can't provide proper perspective on a model conversation.

I'll fix that.

Do you? How?

Hm... I'll see what people on FEM say, then put these all together and hopefully get something decent out of it.

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I'll fix that. Good. :>

Do you? How? I'm sorry, what do you mean?

Hm... I'll see what people on FEM say, then put these all together and hopefully get something decent out of it. Again, I'm from FEM too... :<

Answers in the quote because I was too lazy.

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Well, the people who are online, since I'm asking them as well.

How to show killing random enemies.

Am I not here? >:[ Then again I really know nothing about the story. Or the basic plot of the game. I just know I get to do the EA. ~

Well it's not exactly showing, but it's more like proving a fight through script. Like, Inari turn around then have their mugshot dash through a soldier that appears and make a sword sound. Then have him say "Grah!"

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Am I not here? >:[ Then again I really know nothing about the story. Or the basic plot of the game. I just know I get to do the EA. ~

Well it's not exactly showing, but it's more like proving a fight through script. Like, Inari turn around then have their mugshot dash through a soldier that appears and make a sword sound. Then have him say "Grah!"

We're just talking through the Chatbox, so it's whoever that's online.

That works.

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