Inferno lizard Posted April 18, 2018 Share Posted April 18, 2018 (edited) Here is a thread for feedback for my Legend of Zelda: Heroes of the Triforce story. Here's the story: Edited May 2, 2018 by Inferno lizard Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
indigoasis Posted April 18, 2018 Share Posted April 18, 2018 I accidentally commented on the story thread before seeing this, so my bad. I'm sorry if you saw that. Anyway... It's... really good so far. I love the nod to the original game that you included, as well as the minor poke at the animated series. Pretty well structured, too. Overall, this is very solid, though be watchful of punctuation and if you're missing anything. There was no comma after the "Ex-CUSE you" line Niva said. It's a nitpick on my part, and the only mistake I saw, but I wanted to bring it up nonetheless. I don't want to come off as rude, so I apologize if I did. As a little side commentary, I've always wanted to see a Zelda game with Link as a child and Zelda as an adult. I think it would be a neat contrast. I know this comment was copy-pasted, leave me alone. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Inferno lizard Posted April 18, 2018 Author Share Posted April 18, 2018 20 minutes ago, AlmondJuice said: It's... really good so far. I love the nod to the original game that you included, as well as the minor poke at the animated series. Pretty well structured, too. Overall, this is very solid, though be watchful of punctuation and if you're missing anything. There was no comma after the "Ex-CUSE you" line Niva said. It's a nitpick on my part, and the only mistake I saw, but I wanted to bring it up nonetheless. I don't want to come off as rude, so I apologize if I did. As a little side commentary, I've always wanted to see a Zelda game with Link as a child and Zelda as an adult. I think it would be a neat contrast. Oh, don't worry, there are gonna be more references. Plus, the man at the beginning is Link's uncle like in ALttP, and Niva is Navi with the vowels switched. Also, hmm, that's an interesting idea, I might do that, but in reverse, with Link as the adult and Zelda as the child. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
indigoasis Posted April 18, 2018 Share Posted April 18, 2018 2 minutes ago, Inferno lizard said: Oh, don't worry, there are gonna be more references. Plus, the man at the beginning is Link's uncle like in ALttP, and Niva is Navi with the vowels switched. Also, hmm, that's an interesting idea, I might do that, but in reverse, with Link as the adult and Zelda as the child. Holy smokes, I didn't even see that. That's very clever. Thanks for thinking it was interesting. You could play around with that idea to great effect, I think. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Inferno lizard Posted April 18, 2018 Author Share Posted April 18, 2018 12 minutes ago, AlmondJuice said: Holy smokes, I didn't even see that. That's very clever. Thanks for thinking it was interesting. You could play around with that idea to great effect, I think. I thought about naming the fairy Ivan and making it a male fairy, but I decided against it. But if it was a male fairy, I think it'd have a british accent. The thought hadn't occurred to me, but with the story I've planned out it could work. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
indigoasis Posted April 18, 2018 Share Posted April 18, 2018 12 minutes ago, Inferno lizard said: I thought about naming the fairy Ivan and making it a male fairy, but I decided against it. But if it was a male fairy, I think it'd have a british accent. The thought hadn't occurred to me, but with the story I've planned out it could work. A british accent, that's awesome. At the end of the day, it's your story, so do what you want to do. Unless you had the adult Link and child Zelda idea already, then my bad. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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