Ragged

This is Sunwoo/Boron, I'm at Ragged's house. I'm giving you guys a 2-day extension. So the new phase end date is Tuesday July 7 pm 11:59:59 PM PST.

Title: Peace in a Bottle Fandom: Fire Emblem Awakening Characters: Chrom and three original characters (Oren, Kayleigh, and Laibach), with others (like Grima) mentioned Word Count: 1987

The relationship doesn't have to be romantic, right - they can become friends or comrades?

This is just one broad criticism. Sometimes you use characters' dialogue to get across information about the world or backstory (especially Sharon's). This can get a little too transparently expository at times, and cause the dialogue to feel unnatural. I would think about if there were ways you could show the information - like through scenes of action - rather than telling us about it. Also - and this goes out to anyone who reads this regardless of writing level - think hard about your characters' personalities, how to translate that personality into dialogue, and figure out what they would or wouldn't say (and how they would say it).

For my money, I really enjoyed the story that was being told here - regardless of the form or format. And, I feel like I got a good sense of Hiro Osami and Rommel as characters in their segments.

Title: Red Sun Over Paradise Setting: Original (but more than a little inspired by Welcome to Nightvale) Characters: a reporter named Gil and the town's residents Words: 1802

All I ask is for is a push back to at least Monday.

That clears that up. Thank you.

So are we writing prose - with dialogue, action, and whatnot? Because "outline" makes me think more of a summary of events, like an entry in a history book. For instance: "Many Air Nomads lost their lives the first night of the Fire Nation invasion." Just wanted to be clear on this prompt.