Nanami Touko Posted October 18, 2010 Author Share Posted October 18, 2010 Ouch. That almost hurts. Oh well. I did proclaim myself to be a cocky arse, so, eh :P I don't think there's anything wrong with the left side of his face, but I'll give you under it. I'm having trouble with that area and am not quite sure what to do :/ Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheReaper Posted October 18, 2010 Share Posted October 18, 2010 (edited) Critique is nice to listen to ... esp since Kanami gives such detailed and good critique. Though when your say AK or TBA level maybe then you can go "pfeh" to critique"Levin's face does look off, maybe his eyes are too be to be him. Since your doing the older version of him right? older fe men tend to have smaller eyes and more shading under the eyes. Edited October 18, 2010 by TheReaper Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nanami Touko Posted October 18, 2010 Author Share Posted October 18, 2010 The reason I'm blowing off Kanami's critique, is because ALS helped me make it, and I trust his more than hers :/ Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheReaper Posted October 18, 2010 Share Posted October 18, 2010 Aye but it was still pretty rude of you. When your a good spriter then you can blow off people ~ Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nanami Touko Posted October 18, 2010 Author Share Posted October 18, 2010 (edited) It was rude, but it was also rude of her to call it something that a newb spriter would make. I consider myself better than that, and I took offense to her comment. I respond to rudeness with rudeness. Edited October 18, 2010 by seph1212 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheReaper Posted October 18, 2010 Share Posted October 18, 2010 (edited) *cough* But..it was true.. Truth can hurt bby Anyway thats my rant over Edited October 18, 2010 by TheReaper Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nanami Touko Posted October 18, 2010 Author Share Posted October 18, 2010 (edited) Ouch. Even if the body doesn't look that good, the hair does :/ And, don't "bby" me. I've had to put up with more crap than this over the internet, so if you honestly think her comments are insulting to me, you're hilariously wrong XD I'm just trolling you gaiz ________ Oh, yeah, I didn't answer you earlier up. It's supposed to be based on the FE5 version of him, not his older version, though, technically they're the same, I like the look of the FE5 one more. Edited October 18, 2010 by seph1212 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chocolate Kitty Posted October 18, 2010 Share Posted October 18, 2010 *Cough* Meanwhile, back on the plot... Claude looks nice, but I think his collar could be a slight bit better. I never like artur's collar btw. Levin's hair shading near his ponytail could also use a small bit of fixing. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nanami Touko Posted October 18, 2010 Author Share Posted October 18, 2010 Happy now, gaiz? Like, seriously, I'm lost with what to do with it now. I think it looks fine, Kanami thinks it looks like newb work, Reaper can't spell "baby" and Dancer thinks the ponytail needs shading work. Help? Levin's hair shading near his ponytail could also use a small bit of fixing. This... Really doesn't help me fix it, as I don't know what to do to fix it. Specific, please? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chocolate Kitty Posted October 18, 2010 Share Posted October 18, 2010 Hmm, let's see if I can be more specific... Right behind his ear there is a line that I feel shouldn't be there. Also looks a bit blocky where the ponytail is created. Like the transition doesn't look right. Sorry that I'm a bit vague, not the best describer(if that's a word?). Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheReaper Posted October 18, 2010 Share Posted October 18, 2010 Circle time On the lower part of the pony tail it seems like the hair is just really flat, shading in the bottom half needs to be less liney, Start of the pony tail seems too stacked with the shading so it doesnt look as though it flows. The eye is lacking shading near where ive circled it on the more to the left. The right hand side of the face OPV, is also too line shaded which makes his face look really straight. Also the shading circled in the collar is too dark in places and the 2nd shade is stacked again. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nanami Touko Posted October 18, 2010 Author Share Posted October 18, 2010 (edited) Finally! Critique I can understand! Someone's actually pointing out where the problems are! Thank you, Reaper Did I win? Finally? I'm not sure how to unflatten the hair you circled, but I tried. Progress? _________________ In other news, random splices from my stream today: You can critique them if you want, though I dunno if I'll ever go back to work on them. I'm liking the one on the left more than the right, though. Edited October 18, 2010 by seph1212 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CT075 Posted October 18, 2010 Share Posted October 18, 2010 The ponytail still looks a little blocky. Maybe try stealing the ponytail off of Pent? Or at least use it as a reference. And those two splices look okay. I can't find anything immediately wrong with it, but since you said that you aren't gonna get back to work on those I'm not gonna bother looking real closely. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nanami Touko Posted October 18, 2010 Author Share Posted October 18, 2010 I said I didn't know if I was going to, not that I wasn't :P And, that IS Pent's ponytail. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CT075 Posted October 18, 2010 Share Posted October 18, 2010 (edited) I knew it looked familiar! On the (our) left side of the ponytail, the lightest shade just looks out of place. Give me a minute and I'll circle it for you. Edited October 18, 2010 by Camtech086 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nanami Touko Posted October 18, 2010 Author Share Posted October 18, 2010 So, totally done with this for now, leave me some CnC, and I'll get back to you. *beep* Kanami, sorry for being an ass. I still love ya :3 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheReaper Posted October 18, 2010 Share Posted October 18, 2010 I think the pony tail looks slightly odd since it usually sits on Pent's shoulder but your Levin is abit taller than that. Maybe bring it down a couple of pixels so it actually rests on his shoulder Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CT075 Posted October 18, 2010 Share Posted October 18, 2010 The actual ponytail looks much better. Now insert it so I can show it off when I get that far in my LP. And I'm totally stealing that ponytail. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
AstraLunaSol Posted October 18, 2010 Share Posted October 18, 2010 What? His current shirt palette isn't the best. Steal one from an existing mug. My typing is shit on a phone. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nanami Touko Posted October 18, 2010 Author Share Posted October 18, 2010 (edited) My god, I'm so done. So, so, so done. ALS, Reaper, anyone, anymore advice? Edited October 18, 2010 by seph1212 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheReaper Posted October 18, 2010 Share Posted October 18, 2010 A+ grade on the new pony tail. Clothing just seems too flat now, but thats probs just the low contrast in the colours of the palette Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nanami Touko Posted October 18, 2010 Author Share Posted October 18, 2010 A+? It's good? You're joking, right? I need someone to do a palette for me. I'm horrid at clothing palettes. The evidence shows. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheReaper Posted October 18, 2010 Share Posted October 18, 2010 Myes well i think its certainly better. It falls better on him and all. Palettes suck balls..Could you do a custom palette of him maybe? Clothing could be used LaRachels or maybe even proto Moulder if you want it darker white Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nanami Touko Posted October 18, 2010 Author Share Posted October 18, 2010 (edited) EDIT: Thanks, ALS. Edited October 18, 2010 by seph1212 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
AstraLunaSol Posted October 18, 2010 Share Posted October 18, 2010 (edited) The white palette is good, but the annoying thing is the outline color. Hope you don't mind me slightly fixing it. >_>; Or that works too. XD Edited October 18, 2010 by Adell Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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