Samias Posted December 28, 2012 Share Posted December 28, 2012 You need to shade the neck more aggressively. Follow the light source you established on the face and put your heaviest shading on the same side. Right now it just looks like the head is floating on top. The armpit shading is also very sparse and feels like your armpit is up too high as a result. Your fold shading should also go away from the center of the body, not towards it. Folds also need to envelope the shoulder to give it shape. That said I think the sleeves look very unusual even for extremely short sleeved t-shirts and you should either find room to move your mug up and make the chest and arm area longer so the arms can comfortably fit a t-shirt, or just don't bother trying to include the bare arms part of the t-shirt because it looks better without. I have stuff to say about the hair but I'm being kicked off the comp at the moment. However I will say the hairline looks weird. I feel like I'm looking at some solid line of something beneath the bangs. [spoiler=FE guys wearing cloth in similar angles.] Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tchyrimi Posted December 28, 2012 Author Share Posted December 28, 2012 (edited) Gonna post this in case I wreck it worse. Edited December 28, 2012 by Tchyrimi Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tchyrimi Posted January 3, 2013 Author Share Posted January 3, 2013 Still working on the hair, I can't seem to do anything with it. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nanami Touko Posted January 3, 2013 Share Posted January 3, 2013 is that a gnome? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
risingSolaris Posted January 3, 2013 Share Posted January 3, 2013 For the second mug, he hair shading is weird, and he lacks AAing around his hair. His shoulders are a bit small, and his ear is quite big. His nose is pointy, and his eyes are strangely big for a guy(?). Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Book of Ereshkigal Posted January 3, 2013 Share Posted January 3, 2013 I more worried about how pointy his head is x3 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Caliban of Sycorax Posted January 4, 2013 Share Posted January 4, 2013 The ear is too high and too far away from the rest of the head. The head is pointed at the top--smooth it out. There's also lots of straight lines in the hair shape that are unnecessary. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tchyrimi Posted January 4, 2013 Author Share Posted January 4, 2013 is that a gnome? Quite the help you are. Anyway, I'll work on what everyone said here in a little bit. If someone else made a post in their gallery, go look at that instead. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nanami Touko Posted January 4, 2013 Share Posted January 4, 2013 hey you didn't answer me D: Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tchyrimi Posted January 4, 2013 Author Share Posted January 4, 2013 It's whatever you want it to be. ;I Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nanami Touko Posted January 4, 2013 Share Posted January 4, 2013 Alright, I'll go tell Snow White we found her missing dwarf! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Alabaster Posted January 4, 2013 Share Posted January 4, 2013 (edited) ^ Edited January 4, 2013 by Ponih Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tchyrimi Posted January 4, 2013 Author Share Posted January 4, 2013 (edited) ^ Why are your spritings so GODNIH!?!? Edited January 6, 2013 by Tchyrimi Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tchyrimi or halfrohp Posted March 8, 2013 Share Posted March 8, 2013 (edited) Still working hard. I've noticed quite a few things to fix already but on a scale of 1 to "oh god stop it!" how chunky do you deem his hair to be? Edit: ignore that stuff. Edited March 19, 2013 by Tchyrimi or halfrohp Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tchyrimi or halfrohp Posted March 19, 2013 Share Posted March 19, 2013 (edited) Started out doing this for the splice comp, but I didn't want to mess with hair splicing and junk. Any crit? Edited March 21, 2013 by Tchyrimi or halfrohp Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tchyrimi or halfrohp Posted March 31, 2013 Share Posted March 31, 2013 Messed around with the left opv hairline and the left eye remains a mystery to me. no love :_: Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Joker Posted April 1, 2013 Share Posted April 1, 2013 people are probably busy around this time with various things. as for crits, I think the right side of his neck looks kinda wonky. His head looks a little long for the body. the hairline still looks funny. It kinda looks like his right side is too far from his neck. iono. for now try moving the head and neck two or three pixels right. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tchyrimi or halfrohp Posted April 2, 2013 Share Posted April 2, 2013 I also like how people posted in like 4-5 other people's galleries and not mine with all that lack of time. I'll probably work on this soon. I just lost my USB and ALL of my portraits not uploaded on the Internet. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Joker Posted April 2, 2013 Share Posted April 2, 2013 well, there was this paired competition thingy and some spriters are busy helping hackers. idk. ono well, goodluck with what your doing then. ono Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tchyrimi or halfrohp Posted April 6, 2013 Share Posted April 6, 2013 (edited) Something new from Yugioh. Still hard at work. So eyes... Edited April 7, 2013 by Tchyrimi or halfrohp Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tchyrimi or halfrohp Posted June 2, 2013 Share Posted June 2, 2013 Sprite issues aside, this should be pretty All work on that previous guy is nonexistent now. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tchyrimi or halfrohp Posted June 12, 2013 Share Posted June 12, 2013 (edited) It seems kind of empty here... Edited June 12, 2013 by Tchyrimi or halfrohp Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tchyrimi or halfrohp Posted June 13, 2013 Share Posted June 13, 2013 Can I please get some critique on this guy except for the hair. I'm messing with his face first. Is it too small? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tchyrimi or halfrohp Posted June 16, 2013 Share Posted June 16, 2013 (edited) Teach me how to denim. teach me- teach me how to denim I'll get to the hair later. Edited June 16, 2013 by Tchyrimi or halfrohp Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Caliban of Sycorax Posted June 18, 2013 Share Posted June 18, 2013 Head's kind of small, for one. Even at the angle. Also the head and body angles don't match. As for the clothing, it's super tight on him. Denim is usually loose. It looks more like spandex with a denim look to it. The pocket's also too high--we should see only the top at best. Widen it by two or three pixels, too. For shading it, just reference denim jackets and try to replicate the texture. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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