Ah don't feel guilty about it, what you said about my piece was completely fair. And frankly I agree with all of it.
Also lol glad my title was good, that's the most important part of the piece. But yeah like Soul said, me and Azure used separate Ott entries. I used "The Story Unknown to All" while Azure used "Always Left Behind". They're pretty similar, but TSUTA is more romance based mainly featuring Lucina, while ALB is more family based, mainly featuring Morgan. Also Severa dies in the latter entry.
Ironically I was originally gonna use a different Ott piece where Severa dies, the one where she gets married to Laslow. Forget what it's called. Then I was like "wait I can just do Lucina x Severa" and changed. Kinda glad I did, I like happy endings.
I mostly agree with everything here. As a stand alone piece, yeah it is pretty weak. I probably should've considered that aspect a little more. On the other hand, it was exactly what I was going for and wanted. I completely intended it to be that way, and I personally like how you need to read the original piece in order to completely understand mine. I could've included more details that then made it so reading the original wouldn't be necessary, but since I went for this from a sequel angle, I thought that doing so would both ruin the flow of the piece.
All that said, I still think the story part at the end has merit, even if without the context of Ott's original piece it seems a little odd. Both as an overall ending, and to show how Severa has slightly grown, or at least that's what I tried to show. Of course the full meaning, like much of the piece, isn't apparent unless you've read both pieces, but even as a stand alone piece I think that cutting the ending would drastically shift the feeling of the piece, since it would instead end on a really cheesy Lucina line, instead of really cheesy thought Severa has. Maybe you have a point.