Dragoncat
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Granted, it's a remake of Fates.
I wish for laguz in the next FE game.
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Granted, but they're squirt guns in the Western release to bump it to an E rating for some reason.
I wish Felix would mention his mom in one of his supports.
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7 minutes ago, eclipse said:
Awakening's a bit tricky to write for, since several of the characters have multiple layers. Cynthia, for example, has the obvious side - her enthusiasm, hero thing, etc. What isn't obvious is that she's heavily traumatized by her mother's death, desperately doesn't want to lose her family again, and will do whatever she thinks is necessary to do that. Thing is, Awakening doesn't make one of the sides obvious. For a good first-person POV, you'll REALLY need to know the character in question. Other side characters may not need quite as much of an in-depth analysis, but "how would they react to Cynthia's personality, given that they have no clue about the trauma she's hiding?" must be considered.
Yeah, Awakening doesn't really touch on the doom and gloom as much, you have to dig for it.
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Because if they killed him there would be no movie.
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The complete disregard for this chonk disappoints me.
https://spyro.fandom.com/wiki/Claude
#FearTheDeer
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11 hours ago, eclipse said:
Your intent appears to be a diary written by Cynthia. Writing existing characters has its ups and downs - you have some personality traits to work with, but if you deviate too far, it won't look like you're writing in that character's voice. Since you're having her interact with other existing characters, you'll also need to have a handle on their personalities, too.
To add to this and maybe give a second opinion, since it's a diary written by Cynthia, OP should mostly have a handle on her personality. Other existing characters not so much, it's first person from her point of view. So she'll see how the other characters are externally but that's it. She might see Claude as "charming and tricky", or for a great example, Felix as "a jerk", without knowing that he's hurting on the inside. Cynthia in particular wouldn't be that good at reading internal thoughts and moods, I don't think.
So to use Sour Puss, she might describe his infamous "go get a husband" to Ingrid like:
QuoteI don't know what this guy's deal is! Girls can absolutely be knights! What a sexist jerk!
Instead of:
QuoteHe told her to "go get a husband", but the look in his amber eyes was saying "I want you to be safe", he's a broken man and he doesn't know how to deal with that.
Basically, since it's first person, use a lot of surface value, OP. Other character dialogue should sound like the other character though.
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4 minutes ago, vanguard333 said:
I'm not a fanficer, but I am an aspiring writer. I'm not sure if I should review this though; I've never understood the idea of fanfics that use pre-existing characters, since I've always seen writing as being for telling your own story.
I understand fanfics that explore a part of the setting with their own original characters, as I can see those kinds of fanfics actually being useful as a way to practice writing skills and creativity by coming up with your own stories and characters while using a pre-existing setting; I once even considered writing one such story for practice, though I never actually did (it was going to be a Dragon Age fan-fic about a clan of Dalish Elves). For me, using one that heavily involves the original's main plot, and uses pre-existing characters, kind-of defeats that purpose.
But, that's just me. I'm currently working on my own novel (though it's been hard to find time to write it).
This is a unique view! Many fanficers kinda look down on OC fic, because they want to read further stories with characters they're familiar with, and not everybody is skilled enough at writing to make good OCs. But I can agree with this, my main reason for writing fanfic over original fiction that I tell people when they say "why don't you write original?" is that half the work is done already. Nowadays I make OCs to fit in where they're needed, or flesh out very minor canons to the point where they might as well be OCs.
OP doesn't have a unique idea, let's be honest, but there are really no bad ideas, just bad execution of ideas.
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Fanficer here! I'm looking to improve my skills as a beta reader, so I can help you! Do you want me to post it here or on the story on AO3? A combo of the two? Like do you want me to give my critical comments here and what you did right on AO3 or vice versa? Do you want critique on grammar/spelling? Story? Characterization?
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"I'm not racist, I have a black friend!"
"I'm not homophobic, I have a gay friend!"
Etc etc. Smh.
@Karimlan The way you worded that is kinda confusing, just "ask" any Nazi who says he has Jewish friends? Shouldn't that be "Just as any Nazi who says he has Jewish friends"?
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I want Spyro in, but for a bizarre pick, I'll say Ripto. His final smash summons the robot Gulp. He fights with fire blasts from his scepter. He's small and light.
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Time for Dcat to add her two cents after following this topic from the beginning.
The pronoun options hurt noone. You are welcome to just say you are he/him or she/her. Those options are the same as saying male or female. It's like the covid masks, they are not hurting you, but their existence is good for the community as a whole, shut up and wear the damn mask/shut up and set it to what you want it to be.
People are complaining about non binary people's right to exist, and last I checked, the pronouns are just for male, female, and non binary, it's not like we have shit like "ponyself" or "wolf" or "the moon".
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Ngl I thought this was gonna be Sophie from The BFG lol.
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If a woodchuck could chuck wood he'd be so rich and famous he wouldn't be doing any wood chucking he'd be sitting in his mansion watching TV.
Why am I eating mac n cheese?
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Hey, I'm Anacybele's friend. Sadly, she is not here anymore. Thought I'd let you know.
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You can hit things that should be impossible to hit with a WHOP.
Big Mac.
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On 12/16/2020 at 6:28 AM, DragonFlames said:
Of course Dimitri gets cheezits and hot cocoa and Felix gets a spray bottle.
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Pokemon Clover looks good tho. The dead regis is a cool idea.
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11 minutes ago, Use the Falchion said:
Marianne's adoptive father doesn't hate her or think she's worthless, but Marianne's depression and crippling self-doubt put things into those perspectives. He's not nice, but he's not unkind either.
Yeah, this.
On the subject of Marianne or rather, her crest and bloodline. Maurice, being the wholesome sweet farm boy I say he was, does not like it when he has to kill livestock or worse, humans, to eat. He will literally kneel, bow his head, and clasp his front paws and pray to the spirits for forgiveness when there is nothing else around for him to hunt. When he gets hungry, he rampages, so he tries to keep himself fed on wild animals. The giant wolves in Marianne's paralogue had decided he was their alpha male.
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Welll. We are on the subject of Nemesis, time to share Fallen Scales and Rising Crests lore/headcanons. Writing this damn thing is hard, but no shortage of ideas.
Blaiddyd and Fraldarius had a whirlwind romance. They had to cut it short after crest ingestion because the Agarthans were like "lol nope we don't want to risk double crested offspring we don't know if it will be safe"
Daphnel was bisexual. He was interested in Riegan, but it was one sided. Riegan, on the other hand, was sapiosexual and pickier than the rest of the boys.
Maurice. Omg Maurice, he's become the mascot of the story and the elites in general. He was a farmer who, after the Storm Dragon attacked his village, set out and was hired by Nemesis as the supply/convoy boy. Nobody expected him to do much else, but he finished off the Storm Dragon later in self defense. They let him take the crest. He transformed later for a couple reasons. One: the Agarthans had given magical protection to everyone but him. Two: he wasn't as trained as a warrior, so it was harder on him in general. All those centuries later, he recognizes Marianne as his scion because he could smell his crest on her and she reminded him of his daughter.
After crest ingestion, they all got dark gray scarves with their crest brand on them to match Nemesis' cape.
Gautier adopted Miklan in the afterlife. Felt sorry for him.
This was given to me by somebody on Reddit: Nemesis was crushing on Seiros and was gonna bring her the skull of the Immaculate One. Sure, he'd had classic bandit "damn imma tap that" feelings before, but Seiros, he wanted for more than one night. It was the closest to love he ever felt. Little did he know that she and the Immaculate One were the same thing...
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14 minutes ago, Jotari said:
Well he did butcher the Nabateans in their sleep and then turn their bones into weapons, so I doubt he was ever the most standup guy.
Fair point. Could have just been racist against dragons.
And I did say Thanos, who wasn't the most standup guy either.
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22 minutes ago, Jotari said:
Given Nemesis's type, I could buy that not a lot of women would have a choice in the matter.
Perhaps. He could have been more mellow when he was alive, we only see him as a pissed off vengeful lich after all.
I would say he might have been more of a calculating sort and he kept his group together easily because of how big and strong he was, so nobody wanted to challenge his authority. Like I never got into the MCU but something like Thanos maybe?
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On 12/10/2020 at 12:51 AM, Jotari said:
Nemesis lived over a thousand one hundred years ago. If he had any children then half of everyone in Fodlan would be related to him (that's about the same time frame as Charlemagne who they say pretty much all of Europe is related to). If Jearlt was some kind of magical direct descendant, well then he'd probably have the Crest of Flames like all the other descendants of the 10 elites.
On 12/10/2020 at 5:50 PM, Shanty Pete's 1st Mate said:Erm, it doesn't quite work like that. Ingrid, for instance, says that she was alone among her siblings in having the Crest of Daphnel - even though they were all descended from her (him? I don't remember). Similarly, Annette bears the Crest of Dominic, through her father, Gilbert (who doesn't have it).
It's conceivable that Nemesis would have had children, but that either a) they went into hiding, fearing persecution from the church, or b) the Crest of Flames rarely manifested in them. I'm not saying this did happen, but the notion that "Byleth has the Crest of Flames as a long-lost descendant of Nemesis" is at least tenable.
Daphnel was male. Only Fraldarius and Lamine were females.
Nemesis strikes me as the type to have kids he didn't know of. I'm saying he had one with a woman he spent one night with. The woman planned on finding him again to show him his child, but the church had started to hunt down the elites. She felt unsafe. She told people the father was a random war master/gladiator/etc. Not too far from the truth. And shortly after she had the idea to find him, news got out that he'd been killed, so she couldn't anyway.
He probably only had that one kid because...well....dude was a heckin chonkosaurus. His canon height is 7'2 according to datamine. Big and strong, not many women would be able to handle the act of making a kid with him. I would assume. The one that did was kind of a big gal herself.
Corrupt a wish: FE edition
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Now it's so fast you beat it in five minutes and go "what just happened"
I wish for a support conversation that amounts to medieval GTA with a carriage.