Not bad, better then most the shit on fanfiction.net
Pity I'm having some trouble with my own story at the moment so the fact you can get three coherent chapters out pisses me off a little.
Jealousy is a bitch.
Overall I likeded it.
I am a generic white boy in every aspect, aside from the whole wanting to be black thing.
@Branded: I like Fried Chicken and Watermelon, and I'm whiter then most Emo Kids.