Not one for self inserts from real world that know the plot but I think I owe a fellow fanficer my two cents.
Why was Dimitri "holding the lance like his first born child"? I find that an odd analogy. And this coming from someone whose guilty pleasure is OC fankids, whose 3H ficverse is a Revelations style "all lords live" with a 2nd generation, and I'll just say Dimitri is such a wholesome father omg.
Dragon Rhea is...dragon Rhea, sounds accurate. Even if I haven't played Crimson Flower yet, I have fond memories of the first time I saw her dragon form. JESUS CHRIST THE POPE IS A DRAGON GET IN THE CAR.
What type of unit do you plan for Aiken to be? Like class/weapons/etc?