Dark Sage Posted August 8, 2010 Share Posted August 8, 2010 (edited) Well, hate is exaggerating, but people just don't like her because she seems to be more of a tool than a character. Anyway, she's gotten a bit better in my opinion, but I still think you should have her branch out a lot more with the other members of the group and give her some conflict with Damian or Esphyr. Maybe she's not satisfied or maybe she's jealous? And I'm running on empty right now. @Psych: I wasn't criticizing him as much I was telling people's opinion. And you're criticizing too as well. Edited August 8, 2010 by Dark Sage Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phoenix Posted August 8, 2010 Share Posted August 8, 2010 (edited) Well to each their own really. Since the rain's coming down at a specific angle, Viv could keep herself mostly dry by having Susann keep her wing raised(while Viv ducks down a bit). Alternatively, there is an umbrella in hammerspace her orange case. Irina's probably wrapping up a little bit in HM's cloak(too much les yay?) Edited August 8, 2010 by Phoenix Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
-Cynthia- Posted August 8, 2010 Share Posted August 8, 2010 (edited) Hate is stronger than I would use, personally. I wouldn't say like either though. Edited August 8, 2010 by -Cynthia- Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dark Sage Posted August 8, 2010 Share Posted August 8, 2010 Yeah, I just said that. And Psych, don't push me. I've had a very busy weekend with little sleep, so just cool it ok? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
riariadne Posted August 8, 2010 Share Posted August 8, 2010 I dislike Aiya because she's too perfect. She has huge wyvern, a flawless relationship, and she's just too positive sometimes. If she's scared, she can't always say "oh it's nothing". I'd like her to admit she's scared. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ether Posted August 8, 2010 Share Posted August 8, 2010 Well, Aiya has never found it easy to get along with men, which is not something I can just retcon now. She's alright with Lev, and wants to get to know Isotov, but the other guys aren't all that approachable to her, at least not right now. Alferis is getting there, but he's not quite clear yet, mostly due to the bouts of earlier conflict. Aiya's more comfortable with other girls. That's why she was fooling around with Irina and such. She isn't really going to shun anyone who wants to talk to her, aside from Reika, who she really doesn't like, but not all that many people are very approachable, and no one has made efforts to interact with her, like, ever, basically. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Psych Posted August 8, 2010 Share Posted August 8, 2010 Well, what? It's true, as sad as I am to say that. The only people who I don't remember you saying anything about are; Your characters, Heinz (and I'm not even sure about that) Eric, Derek, Morgan, and Charlotte. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
riariadne Posted August 8, 2010 Share Posted August 8, 2010 Psych, shut up. You're too sensitive. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phoenix Posted August 8, 2010 Share Posted August 8, 2010 (edited) @ DamianxAiya I said it before and I'll say it again, DamianxAiya doesn't actually need internal conflict to not be sueish. It needs conflict in general. They don't have to argue or anything, but nothing, and I mean NOTHING ever threatens their relationship in any way shape or form. That's highly unrealistic. Maybe if something happened once in awhile besides one or both of them getting critically wounded that would help. So far, their relationship seems to be blessed by the gods or something. That's kind of meh. @ Aiya specifically She seems alright. Just needs more reason to live than Damian for a more realistic appearance. Even women raised to slave over their husbands had their own sets of unrelated interests, hobbies, pursuits, etc. EDIT: Gae-Borg comes across as a fringe threat IMO, not something episodic that's clear as day. It also revolves around death itself which is not what I'm trying to get at. Edited August 8, 2010 by Phoenix Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ether Posted August 8, 2010 Share Posted August 8, 2010 Lightning... did you not just see the panic attack earlier? She calmed herself down forcibly so she wasn't useless, but she was still incredibly scared. She's still scared right now. She puts up a strong front, but if someone were to ask her if she was worried, she'd likely start to cry, depending on who asks. As for the relationship, I'm still looking for the right way to express her, without causing a massive meltdown. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dark Sage Posted August 8, 2010 Share Posted August 8, 2010 I think you're approaching the right direction when it comes to giving Aiya more than Damian, but it's really slow. And all the above points have been said before. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Snowy_One Posted August 8, 2010 Author Share Posted August 8, 2010 Esphyr needs to get tough again IMO. She's been too sappy of late and hasn't had much to do. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phoenix Posted August 8, 2010 Share Posted August 8, 2010 I sense another OP battle approaching >_>' Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ether Posted August 8, 2010 Share Posted August 8, 2010 I know Kelas is kinda androgynous, but she's soaked by the rain. It should be pretty obvious that she's female at this point, since the loose clothes stick to your skin no matter how loose they were. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Inactive Account Posted August 8, 2010 Share Posted August 8, 2010 He knew she was a woman from the start, I thought... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phoenix Posted August 8, 2010 Share Posted August 8, 2010 Probably travel distance. Kelas likely isn't two feet away from Altion(meaning he could easily still mistake her for a guy if she's say, on the other side of the group and slightly obscured by rain fog). Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Snowy_One Posted August 8, 2010 Author Share Posted August 8, 2010 He knew Kelas was a woman from the getgo (voice, facial shape, whatnot). He's either insulting or complimenting her depending on how you look at it. Either he's insulting the fact that she's flat because she's turned him away and insulted him, or he's complimenting her because he's a knight and seems to think only men should fight (notice he says Esphyr, Morgan, and Kelas should be in the center). Pick your interpretation. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dark Sage Posted August 8, 2010 Share Posted August 8, 2010 By today's feminist standards, asking her to stay back because only men should fight is considered insulting. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Inactive Account Posted August 8, 2010 Share Posted August 8, 2010 I guess Snowy's trying to explain Altion's reasoning. How it will be taken is another matter entirely. (Altion seems to be having some culture shock going on versus the rest of the setting.) Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phoenix Posted August 8, 2010 Share Posted August 8, 2010 Nyuuug ... ... my skin is crawling ... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ether Posted August 8, 2010 Share Posted August 8, 2010 Nyuuug ... ... my skin is crawling ... CRAWLING! IN! MY SKIN! THESE WOUNDS, THEY WILL NOT HEAL! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phoenix Posted August 8, 2010 Share Posted August 8, 2010 (edited) Linkin Park is awesomeness incarnate. Edited August 8, 2010 by Phoenix Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Psych Posted August 8, 2010 Share Posted August 8, 2010 THE BEASTS! THEY WISH TO CONSUME ME! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Snowy_One Posted August 8, 2010 Author Share Posted August 8, 2010 I guess Snowy's trying to explain Altion's reasoning. How it will be taken is another matter entirely. (Altion seems to be having some culture shock going on versus the rest of the setting.) Erm, you just noticed? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Inactive Account Posted August 8, 2010 Share Posted August 8, 2010 Erm, I noticed a while ago. Others don't seem to have. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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