Mufasa Posted July 20, 2008 Author Share Posted July 20, 2008 ...says the person that wrote the line. Lol.It WAS a good ep. Thank you. I feel I could have made it better if I was a professional, but it's hard to show an epic fight and keep people interested when you're writing it instead of showing it. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Inactive Account Posted July 20, 2008 Share Posted July 20, 2008 Yeah, especially with the script-like writing style, I imagine that would be hard. You're pretty good at showing the action scenes though. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mufasa Posted July 20, 2008 Author Share Posted July 20, 2008 Yeah, especially with the script-like writing style, I imagine that would be hard. You're pretty good at showing the action scenes though. Thanks. I kinda did a cop-out at one point there. I pretty much said: "It's an epic fight, but I'm not gonna tell you exactly what's happening." Lol. It was late when I was writing it, and I had a lot of stuff to do this weekend. I'm so shot. And I have my driver's test tommorow at 8. So I'm not writing another episode till at least tommorow afternoon. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Inactive Account Posted July 20, 2008 Share Posted July 20, 2008 Good luck on your test. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Serene Posted July 20, 2008 Share Posted July 20, 2008 Have fun on your test, and while you wait for Lyle's new part read my story Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mufasa Posted July 20, 2008 Author Share Posted July 20, 2008 Good luck on your test. Thanks. I appreaciate it. Have fun on your test, and while you wait for Lyle's new part read my story You have too many stories. That's why I never read them. I'm sorry to say. I'd like to, but I can never figure out which one's are going to keep up. *Keeps topic active to help Kiryn reach Heron level. XD* Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Inactive Account Posted July 20, 2008 Share Posted July 20, 2008 Lol, advertising. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Serene Posted July 20, 2008 Share Posted July 20, 2008 Thanks. I appreaciate it.You have too many stories. That's why I never read them. I'm sorry to say. I'd like to, but I can never figure out which one's are going to keep up. *Keeps topic active to help Kiryn reach Heron level. XD* Well I've decided to only focus on this one story I'm doing, the one in my sig Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Inactive Account Posted July 20, 2008 Share Posted July 20, 2008 Hmm... maybe I should stick ads in my sig... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mufasa Posted July 20, 2008 Author Share Posted July 20, 2008 Lol, advertising. Hey, if you can, you may as well. Remember my old sig with the histories? And this one now? Well I've decided to only focus on this one story I'm doing, the one in my sig Well, maybe I'll check it out when I have time and my brain isn't mush. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Serene Posted July 20, 2008 Share Posted July 20, 2008 Yeah and I also post the last update time that I have had Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Inactive Account Posted July 20, 2008 Share Posted July 20, 2008 The update time might be a bit much. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mufasa Posted July 20, 2008 Author Share Posted July 20, 2008 The update time might be a bit much. Congrats on Heronship Lady Kiryn the Chosen one. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Inactive Account Posted July 20, 2008 Share Posted July 20, 2008 -laughs at Lyle's response- Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cymbeline Posted July 20, 2008 Share Posted July 20, 2008 That was a good fight scene. =) Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Desdemona Posted July 20, 2008 Share Posted July 20, 2008 Yay, a fight scene! You pull them off pretty well for writing in script form. at Fireman. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mufasa Posted July 20, 2008 Author Share Posted July 20, 2008 That was a good fight scene. =) Yay, a fight scene! You pull them off pretty well for writing in script form. at Fireman. Thank you both for your compliment. I dunno if I mentioned this before or not, but I added that line in right after I posted the story. So it's edited in. XD Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mufasa Posted July 22, 2008 Author Share Posted July 22, 2008 New Episode: Search. *The troupe gets off the ship onto a rocky surface. They notice the island they have landed on has no sign of life on it, and even the water seems to avoid getting near it.* Nightmare: That’s an odd sight. Arcturus: It indeed is. That is caused by the island’s aura. It’s powerful enough to kill anything to venture into it. Nightmare: Um.... Arcturus: Oh! I’m sorry. It doesn’t kill humans. The aura would only cause slight discomfort at most to the weakest of us. Raven: Hear that Masu? Masu: <_< Cornelius: Arcturus. We don’t have time for games. Arcturus: Yes of course. Please, let us move forward. *The group walks into the cave. Arcturus and Cornelius leads the way. Idus is at the end of the group, while Desdemona and Cymbeline are walking alongside him.* Fox: So what exactly are we looking for? Arcturus: Don’t worry. I already know where it is. Masu: Then didn’t you get it when you were here? Arcturus: Because I couldn’t without Cornelius’ holy powers. I need him to dispel the liquid around the jewel. Nightmare: I’m guessing the jewel is what we’re after? Arcturus: Precisely. Well. Looks like we’re here. *Two broken statues are shattered across the ground of the cavern. In the center of the room there is a red glow.* Masu: What happened here? Arcturus: Last time I was here I destroyed the two guardian statues. However, I couldn’t dispel the liquid. Cornelius? Cornelius: *He unsheathes his blade. Then he runs his finger down the blade, which starts giving off a white glow. The group approaches the red pool of acid, and Cornelius sticks his blade into the liquid, which dispels and leaves a glowing red jewel.* There. Arcturus: Perfect. *He picks up the jewel.* We’re finished here. Fox: Er. Wait. Arcturus: Pardon? Fox: I think it’s time we told you. Raven: You sure? Arcturus: Tell me what? Fox: Well, we’re not from here. Arcturus: What do you mean. Nightmare: Well, you know how we just appeared out of nowhere? We’re not actually from this world. Idus: What!? Raven: We’re from a different plane of existence. Cornelius, Arcturus, and Idus: !!!! Cornelius: That’s a little hard to believe..... Nightmare: Well we have a friend who went missing not to long ago into the planes so we went looking for him. Arcturus: Wait. What’s this about planes? Masu: Should we really be telling him all this? Fox: Shut-up Masu. There are different worlds, and each world has it’s own plane. We went looking for our friend who left our plane. Arcturus: What’s his name? Masu: Lyle... Idus: Lyle? Nightmare: Yeah. Arcturus: *Glances to Cornelius.* Well, we’ll try to help you in any way we can. Though I’m not sure just how much we can help. Fox: Just the fact that you have been helping us all this time is enough. We just wanted to let you know why we came here. Cornelius: Well, we’ll have to discuss whether to believe you or not, but at the very least, I’d like to get back to the ship. *He walks toward the entrance. Masu and the others follow.* Arcturus: Idus..... Idus: Yes sir? Arcturus: When we get back to the ship....when you get the chance, kill them. Would you? Idus: .....Yes sir. Arcturus: Always glad to see you being loyal Idus. *Later that evening. The door to the brig opens.* Nightmare: Who’s there? *Nightmare’s sword is tossed at him. He grabs it.* Idus: Here are your weapons. We’re getting out of here. Fox: What? What’s going on? Idus: Arcturus and Cornelius want to kill you. I’m helping you. Raven: What? That doesn’t make any sense! Idus: I know about the planes. They know about the planes. They want to kill you. Masu: Why should we trust you!? You’re working with them! Idus: Because I know Lyle Dayek! Everyone: ! Idus: Now come on! We don’t have time for this! Fox: How do you know Lyle!? Idus: I’ll explain later, come on! *None of them move.* I said ‘come on!’ Raven:...... Nightmare: ...... Masu:...... Fox:...... Cymbeline: I trust you Idus. Desdemona: Me to. Fox: .....Fine! Let’s go. *They go out onto the deck. Idus cuts the ropes to the lifeboat.* Idus: Get in the boat. *The twins go first. Then Fox, then Raven. The bells start to ring.* Maus: What’s that?! Idus: Shit! They know we’re out here. Go on ahead, I’ll catch up. Nightmare: You can’t take them all on your own. Idus: I don’t plan to. I’ll be right there. Just go. Nightmare: ......Don’t you lie to me Idus. Idus: I wouldn’t give you the pleasure. Nightmare: Heh. *He jumps off the ship and swims to the boat.* Idus: *The crew is starting to gather.* You’re turn Masu. Masu: I’m not leaving you to play hero! I want some action to! Idus: This isn’t a game Masu! Masu: No! Everyone thinks I suck now! I want to help! Idus: We don’t have time for this! *Tosses Masu into the water.* Masu: AH!!!!! ???: Idus....I’m dissapointed. Idus: *Turns around to see the entire crew staring at him with their weapons.* Sorry. Arcturus: I thought that maybe I’d let you alone live. But I suppose it wasn’t meant to be. Idus: So. You know who I am? And you still think you can win? Arcturus: strong as you may be you can’t take all of us. Those in the boat will be easily taken out as well. *Boat.* Fox: Shit! He’s surronded! There’s no way he’ll escape! Masu: *Soaking wet.* Bastard.... *Back on ship.* Idus: *He takes his sword and puts it down the front of his shirt and rips his shirt open.* Arcturus: Hm? *Boat* Fox: Oh my..... Raven: Hey! Cym and Des: *Stare with grins.* Nightmare: Ugh.... *Ship.* Arcturus: What exactly are you trying to do? Idus: I guess you don’t know that much about me after all. *Angel wings appear on his back. He jumps off the ship and flies to the lifeboat.* Arcturus: Shit....Should we go after them? Cornelius: No. We wait for now. We have the jewel. That’s what’s important right now. Arcturus: Of course. To Be Continued: Next Episode: Talk. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Inactive Account Posted July 22, 2008 Share Posted July 22, 2008 OH THE DRAMATICNESS Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mufasa Posted July 22, 2008 Author Share Posted July 22, 2008 OH THE DRAMATICNESS Well it's gotta be somewhere. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Songbird Posted July 22, 2008 Share Posted July 22, 2008 Awesome. Knew Idus would help out once he heard Lyle was involved. I almost went "wtf" when he agreed to kill them at first. But I'm glad he helped in the end. XD Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Desdemona Posted July 22, 2008 Share Posted July 22, 2008 Yay, Idus helps! at my part. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Masu Posted July 22, 2008 Share Posted July 22, 2008 And those idiots didnt listen to me. Pfft. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mufasa Posted July 24, 2008 Author Share Posted July 24, 2008 New Episode: Talk *The crew made their way to a nearby tavern. The bartender stares nervously at the members of the 11th squad. Damon, Princess Kilvas, Bianchi and Arc are seated at one table. They are talking.* Damon: Okay. First thing I gotta ask.....What the fuck are you guys doin here?! Princess Kilvas: Well, we went looking for Lyle. Damon: Isn’t he with you guys? Bianchi: He left.... Damon: Why? Arc: We dunno. All we do know is that he left on purpose and into the planes. Damon: Well, I didn’t have anything to do with it. I wonder what’s up.... Princess Kilvas: So Damon, can you get in contact with him somehow? Damon: I wish I could. How the hell did you guys get here anyway? Bianchi: We used a spell. However we needed two people and one of them is somewhere else. Damon: Now that you mention it, I don’t see that Masu kid. He was always around you right Princess? Where is he now? Arc: We don’t know. We all got separated. Damon: I see...Well I’ll tell you what. My friends probably won’t come, but I’ll travel with you in Masu’s place. Princess Kilvas: You really don’t have to.... Damon: Yeah I do. Otherwise you guys will just be stuck here. I’ll help you find Lyle, and your other friends. It’s the least I could do. Bianchi: Thanks Damon. Kenpachi: *Walks over. The rest of the 11th squad members walk over behind him.* Oi! Damon. We’re leavin now. Damon: Actually Kenpachi, I’m gonna help these guys out to find Lyle. Kenpachi: Eh? Lyle’s missing? Arc: Sorta. Kenpachi: We’re leavin. But we’ll keep an eye out for him. See ya around Damon. Damon: See ya. Yachiru: *Jumps on Damon’s head.* BYE DAMONY!!!! Damon: MPHG!!!! Princess Kilvas: O_o Kenpachi: Let’s go. *Yachiru jumps off Damon’s face and leaps onto Kenpachi’s back. Kenpachi slashes the air with his sword which opens up a portal.* Yumichka: Such a beautiful girl. With such beautiful black wings. *Sigh.* Such beauty is wasted on you Damon. Damon: <_< Asshole... Ikkaku: Don’t die before I get to beat you again. Damon: Can’t promise that. Cause I ain’t losing to you ever. *The team walks through the portal and leaves.* Arc: ......They seem nice..... Damon: Eh. They grow on you. *Looks around.* Where’s everybody else? *The bar is empty except for their table.* Bianchi: They went to bed. Arc: ...I think I’m going to join them. It’s been a hectic day..*Gets up and walks towards the rooms.* Damon: You’re not the one who had his arms cut off.... Princess Kilvas: ........ Damon: ........ Bianchi: .......Well, I think I’m going to bed to. Princess Kilvas: What? Why? Bianchi: Well, everyone’s doing it! *She leaves.* Damon: You gonna go to? Princess Kilvas: Not yet.... Damon: So how are you and Masu doing? Last I saw, your relationship was just getting started. Princess Kilvas: Well, we’re still together...... Damon: ....Sounds like you’re having troubles. Princess Kilvas: What?! How do you gather that!? Damon: Well for one, your reaction just now. Princess Kilvas: ....... Damon: Want to talk about it? Princess Kilvas: Not really...... Damon: That’s fine then..... Princess Kilvas: ........ Damon: ........ Princess Kilvas: Thank you. By the way. Damon: For what? Princess Kilvas: For saving us back there. Damon: Kenpachi was the one who beat em. Princess Kilvas: Well yeah, but if you hadn’t come when you did, I’m sure that guy would have killed us....Kenpachi only came because you were fighting him anyway... Damon: Eh. Don’t worry about it. I wouldn’t let you die. Princess Kilvas: What? Damon: I wouldn’t. You’re a unique person. Too good for the lowlifes around you. Princess Kilvas: I’ll have you know that I love Masu very much! Damon: I was talking about me. Princess Kilvas: ...... Damon: If you like Masu this much he must be somethin else to. Cause you deserve only the best. Princess Kilvas: Damon..... Damon: What? Princess Kilvas: ....Thank you. Damon: Psht. I didn’t do anything. Princess Kilvas: I’m sure you’ll find someone too.... Damon: <_< You kiddin? You see the people I hang out with? I’m lucky to even see other people. Still, I’m not worried about women right now anyway. Princess Kilvas: <_< Damon: What? I’m not looking for a relationship is what I meant. I’d do a one-night stand though. Princess Kilvas: Whatever. Perv. Damon: What’s wrong with doing something you want to? I’d rather be a happy fool than a miserable genius. Princess Kilvas: I’m not miserable! Damon: You’re not a genius either. Princess Kilvas: *Splashes her drink in his face.* Jerk... Damon: *Lols.* Princess Kilvas: ........ Damon: ....And here’s that awkward silence again.... Princess Kilvas: .......*They make eye contact.* (What am I doing....I love Masu! And yet....) Damon: Somethin wrong? Princess Kilvas: No...nothing. I’m er....going to bed. Damon: Oh. Well goodnight. Princess Kilvas: *Runs into her room. Then falls on her bed.* .....What’s wrong with me? I can’t do that to Masu.... To Be Continued Next Episode: Please....Call me Zeek. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Songbird Posted July 24, 2008 Share Posted July 24, 2008 I knew Damon was a sweetie. In his own way, anyway. And do I see Princess x Damon at the end there? XD Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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